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InnerVoice
InnerVoiceLv66yr
2018-08-19 12:29

I like the concept of naruto being in one piece but the story is very messy. I only read the 1st chapter and I can already tell. Example: when naruto was on fire, it was said that he did not hesitate to drench the flame on/inhis body and jump. The author didn’t said what he is hesitant about until after. Example 2: if ace is dead, how can he even interact and save naruto from the river? Makes no sense to me. But like I said, love the concept of the story so don’t take this the wrong way. I can tell this can be a good novel, just need a little improvement in grammar and organization of content

Naruto in One Piece

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I really like the concept of the Novel. The only thing I would say I have qualm with is the updates. They're too gosh darn short :'(. But the long chapters do make up for that. As of chapter 4,I'm really liking the dirction the novel is heading in. Though it could use heavy editing.

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Too chessy in my opinion.... Some naruto fans as in the fans of the naruto character will love it.. You can say that he stick to the Origin Of course is a fanfic and all.... So u cant let the novel reader judge it, go to the site that is meant for if you want people who want to read a geniun fanfic not fanfic novel

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