Review Detail of TheWiseOldMan in Daedalus
Review detail
This novel is wanting to be good, however, it’s just not got the umph, the shazam, that makes this a really good read but an okay read. The grammar is not impeccable as I’ve seen other reviews say, and is a little awkward at times. I’ve noted comma splicing in almost every chapter read. The story isn’t bad, but it’s very slow going, and dialogue is sometimes rather monotonous. Slow going isn’t necessarily bad, but there’s really nothing to excite the reader into continuing to read on when the pace is so slow. If I was bored I might pick this back up, I encourage others to read it as well to see if my opinion is validated or not. This novel is just not my cup of tea, but probably could be yours.
Daedalus
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Thank you. Finally a critical review. Don't get me wrong I am not asking for more, but its impossible for everyone to love the same story. We all have our own tastes. I agree with many of your points and I am always trying to improve dialogue. Comma splicing is also something I need to improve the only thing I would say in my defence is this webnovel is free and hence has not had a professional structural editor fix many things including comma splicing. For that, you will have to pay for a book from Amazon etc. Again, thank you, and I will take what you said on board as it is constructive, which is fantastic.
Oniichan_Thickskin:....doesn't work for me though, can't be more thickskinned.
