New author who could use a little bit of work on his English at times, but that being said it's better than 99% of the stuff on this site already! The majority of the time the author follows a logical progression, and shows the motivations for the characters actions in a way that makes sense and is engaging. I think this author has a lot of potential, and if he had a professional editor on hand this novel would be almost publishable! Keep on writing, keep on practicing, keep on doing your thing! As a piece of advice, you might want to start distancing yourself from readers comments. As your novel gets more and more popular you will eventually attract some trolls, and some very loud negative voices from idiots who don't know what a proper story is, and couldn't write one to save their lives. Make sure not to let them discourage you!
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Waaaaah?! Bad English? Ha-ha-ha! Believe it or not, when I first started, I even mentioned in my summary that English is my second language and welcomed corrections. I got praised on it a couple of times and deleted it. To this day, you're the first person to point this out. Why, could you be more specific? I'd be happy to better myself if you pointed me in a direction. Thank you very much for the encouragement. Truth be told, I spend very little time on writing, and I know it could be better. I improved a lot over these 70 chapters, so when I'm confident in publishing, I'll edit it all and go for it. And as for comments... if I got hundreds, I'd ignore them. But so far I have abnormally few reviews and not that many comments, so I read them all just because I can. Negative voices come and go, unhappy readers drop the book, and only the happy ones stay. If someone criticizes me, I take it in good faith. Thank you for the review, and I hope you stick around!
That is a great attitide to have! I see you interact with trolls sometimes in the comments, so I was a bit worried. I am a writer myself, and I got entangled with trolls once my story hit the front page and 100k readers... I almost quit... For a non-native native speaker your english is amazing! There are a few akward phrases you tend to use, and you have a few small grammar issues, but nothing serious. If you like I can try to remember to point them out in comments, but they aren't a huge deal. The most important thing is to stay true to yourself: You don't have to explain why everything is happening on the story, as long as you have a solid grasp yourself - a little mystery can be a good thing. For anything major, foreshadowing is a great technique to help readers follow complex happenings. :)
Oh my, a 100k readers? That sounds insane. I'd be grateful if you pointed my mistakes out, but you don't have to go out of your way. If it's not difficult - sure, go at it, hit me!
