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Adonhit
AdonhitLv106yr
2018-10-03 04:37

This is a pretty well written and enjoyable book. I’ve read several “system” novels and this one is probably in my top 5 just because of the realistic dialogue between the protagonist and the system. There’s a little bit of questionable character development regarding certain side characters but nothing that takes away from the content. Author also does well with handling properly given criticism and communicates well at the moment. (10/2/18) Will update if necessary.

Lone Cultivator in Another World

BlackInk
4.6
105 Chs

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BlackInk
BlackInkAuthor

Thank you for the review! Which side characters seemed awkward to you?

6yr
Adonhit
AdonhitLv10

Hey, I probably should’ve worded that better, just the love he has for Alice and his development with Anna. But I saw that you’re looking to address this soon.

BlackInk:Thank you for the review! Which side characters seemed awkward to you?
6yr
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BlackInk
BlackInkAuthor

Hey, everyone. Thank you for taking a look at my novel. As for many, this is my first attempt at writing, so I welcome constructive criticism. There will be many things - transmigration, a system with a small twist, earning money while trying to cultivate and navigate through school. I just have too many interests, but I believe I will be able to incorporate them all in a healthy way. There are two things I dislike in novels that first come to mind - meaningless nationalism and stupidly huge harems. I will try to address both. The school is, in fact, an international experimental school, and while I cannot refuse myself the pleasure of writing a harem novel, I will do my best to keep it romantic, realistic and not over-the-top. Also, this first chapter was just a test of site's functionality. Stable updates will start from August, 1. With that said, I shall shamelessly rate myself with 5 stars and invite you again to add Model Citizen to your library and take a look again in a few days!

6yr

ArcaneOverlord
ArcaneOverlordLv5

As it is just one chapter, I am posting this review for a little motivation. Please make sure that you keep updates in timely manner even if not on daily basis. I like the synopsis, which is kind of opposite of Scheming system and similar to Hero System. Although it is alright taking inspirations from other pieces, but remember to stand out. ✌️

6yr
XxCrimsonRosexX
XxCrimsonRosexXLv15

I’ve caught up to the most recent chapter and I’m really liked it so far. I’m also curious to the heights he can reach in the future, like can he destroy buildings? Are other people on earth able to even match him after he gets past the first stage of cultivation? Aliens? I like this story’s potential! Keep it up!

6yr
Ehbon
EhbonLv5

Wow, this was fantastic. Based on the summary and my preconceptions about the quality of most webnovels, I thought this novel would be a jumbled mess of poorly spelled words and unplanned story but it proved me wrong. Love the story, love the pacing, keep up the great work.

6yr
DeadmanWhisperer
DeadmanWhispererLv14

One of kind novel so far. Trust me, worth reading it. And why the heck I need to write 140 characters. Really? So how is weather today? Good? Somehow I feel pity for people who want to write short and ****** but powerful review. Yet they are forced to write an essay instead.

6yr
Saarlink
SaarlinkLv5

Reveal spoiler

6yr
Hekyo
HekyoLv5

I don't know why I haven't done this earlier but five starts all around, just think of it as a cultivation novel that is not dog**** and extremely repetitive. With good character writing and fantastic use of human emotion, the characters are real and think logically enough for them to not point a gun at themselves whilst inspecting it. Thank you author san for this gift to the world, I was starting to get jaded from all the horrible cultivation novels presently.

6yr
Killulita
KillulitaLv4

I think this story is above average, but it's not 10/10 140 characters 140 characters 140 characters 140 characters 140 characters 140 characters

6yr
Kurini
KuriniLv5

Holy **** this story is good. Character development, reasonable and thoughtful romance, a clear goal for the mc, and even fantasy settings and a system? If this isn’t a good ass story, flip me over and slam a rock on my ass. Bet. Also the technical side of the story is good. Haven’t seen grammar mistakes, lengthy chapters, and thoughtful descriptions.

6yr
DEMONIC
DEMONICLv10

I hope his mom wont die if that happen it will be a path vengeance i dont like that......... And this 140 word thingy i hope they change this as well....

6yr
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