*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters* Constructive Criticism: WQ- could be better, keep working on it.;,;. SoU- no complaints here.;,;. SD- What story development, I mean, there is a little bit, but it is mostly an information dump... CD- well, you have given the MC a lot of design, but lack when it comes to other characters, they almost don't exist... WB- did it with an information dump, but definitely covered it fully.;,;. Positive Feedback: Good job on your world background and keeping your story updated at a constant pace... you told your readers before hiatus too, so good on you.;,;. Personal Feedback: I think this is a decent foundation to a story, but it would have been if you wrote all of this information down near the beginning for yourself, and slowly explained it through the story.;,;. I apologize, but I will not be continuing your story... for the sake of those who enjoy it, I hope you continue until it is finished.;,;. Scores: WQ 4/5 SoU 5/5 SD 1/5 CD 3/5 WB 5/5 total 3.6/5
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