Review Detail of masteralchemist in Alchemist System

Sorry I'm not trying to write a bad review its just that there is a lot you can do to have better writing 1. Check your Spelling 2. Edit and make sure the story is going how you imagined 3. Add depth to the chapter and try to build a good background. (Just constructive criticism) *spoiler* Why would he just leave HIS mom without saying any thig