Review Detail of Iwalkthestars in Elemental Nations: Oni of the Whirpool
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Hello! Author here. First I want to thank everyone for reviewing my story. Even the negative reviews are welcome. This particular story of mines is an attempt to be dark and bloody. Let me add some points of this story. 1) He will be OP to an extent. He does have the Rinnegan. He has a system that allows him to exchange tokens for Jutsu. Let’s not forget he has Mokuton and the Byakugan via his first path. 2) Since He has altered the verse the power level will be altered as well. You might see a weaker Orochimaru and a stronger Sakura etc. 3) I usually don’t like harems because they are hard to pull off and I’m a rookie at best in writing. I don’t have those chops,and I barely can date one girl irl lol. So my shamless review of my own story done ✅
Elemental Nations: Oni of the Whirpool
Iwalkthestars
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Iwalkthestars:It all depends on work & school tbh. I’m hoping to post two chapters a week. I might just have to cut those story chaps to a thousand words though
What I liked most was the "dark and bloody" and lack of romance (and I'm a girl). The "dark and bloody" was well written in that "the bloody" enhanced the dark intense mood but wasn't the focus. You did what's harder in my opinion - you created a dark mood that happened to have "bloody scenes" rather than trying to use "bloody scenes" to create a dark mood. Sooooo - great writing and please please please continue writing it and updating!