Review Detail of Lord_haden in Elemental Nations: Oni of the Whirpool
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Dark man ways too dark even i feel lole unleashing my undead minions on some characters you created and thats coming from someone with no heart god help your mind my friend cuz the demons are alredy in it.... still a good novel but for a overpowered mc with a cheat doujutsu and system you made him too weak weak on an extreme mental level and too trusting for someone that has a broken heart like him.. they way i see it u should have just made him kill her and go train by itself thats how i feel his mind would take him if i was him... but we never know it is your novel so hope you suprise us..
Elemental Nations: Oni of the Whirpool
Iwalkthestars
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I appreciate your opinion of my novel. I wanted a dark them to the whole Narutoverse; at least, to the best of my ability. He is not necessarily weak, as you put it. In fact he is quite powerful. In two weeks he had come far, he is a eight-year old kid tho, still. Also, I want Yakumo character to be a tipping point so he can have further pain.
Thats why i did say you could surprise us i just think she is useless seeing the uzumaki that you have in jail she should be the real reason for his pain haha her love and the fact that its obvious you will kill her to advance could be the lever you needed for him to breack completly but ill trust yoir plans and hope you manage to make my dark op mc needs come to life haha i do love the idea amd hope to read more
Iwalkthestars:I appreciate your opinion of my novel. I wanted a dark them to the whole Narutoverse; at least, to the best of my ability. He is not necessarily weak, as you put it. In fact he is quite powerful. In two weeks he had come far, he is a eight-year old kid tho, still. Also, I want Yakumo character to be a tipping point so he can have further pain.
She actually want see him again for years in the future. There wasn’t love, but I guess I wanted him to still think he could trust, maybe have friends. Unfortunately lol
Lord_haden:Thats why i did say you could surprise us i just think she is useless seeing the uzumaki that you have in jail she should be the real reason for his pain haha her love and the fact that its obvious you will kill her to advance could be the lever you needed for him to breack completly but ill trust yoir plans and hope you manage to make my dark op mc needs come to life haha i do love the idea amd hope to read more