Review Detail of tiansheng in Primordial Remanents

I think you do a good job in mixing western and eastern fantasy (I'm a sucker for fantasy). The story and world building also seem to progress at a steady pace. However, you have some glaring grammatical issues which appear odd because you possess a rich vocabulary (you can try using Grammarly to fix some of those). As long as you can fix those issues, I believe your writing will become outstanding. Lastly, stretching the prologue across several chapters is, in my humble opinion, something you should try to avoid as it can frustrate the readers and feel like you're dragging the story. As for the story itself, for now, I can't say much about it since I'm only in the sixth chapter, but if the prologue is any indication, it should be quite interesting. Best of luck to you!