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So far you only expressed the dark side of the mc and he even quickly recovered... and then even tho reluctant at first he sorta got used to killing infected. So if you want to go along with the darkness thingy, you might as well make him a reject of most human settlements, you know having Ella a ruler class as a kin. and he isn't the smartest only having base stats on INT when it first started off, and with people mostly realizing analyze is the most helpful. he could get schemed on. you know instead of being just rejected, they would plot to kill him. with him having to resort to becoming an infected to survive. i mean it depends, also you never really showed how fast his regeneration is. also you really need world background like i understand not having any for now. also MC and Ella needs to be more fleshed out, we know that he forced himself to survive so he can take revenge on that bastard god and he becomes calm when in extreme rage, but other than that what? Ella is only a kid but you should portray her more of a kid with pride, but being thought by her brother to stay lowkey?... and world background, since internet prob isnt a thing maybe also SMS maybe make it like wanderers or traders. after a month or two of the infection. make it so when they trade with mc they will give gossips, ofc if you plan to let the mc in settlements he can get info maybe fairly easily after a few months atleast on nearby settlements if wanderers and traders become a thing

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A God's Apocalyptic Entertainment

Zevren

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Zevren
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Hey man thanks for the Review, I'll take what you have said and think hard about a lot of the points you've mentioned. I was sort of thinking about the whole rejected by settlements thing because of Ella. But i have no defined story. I should have a story board ect. But everything that i'm putting out right now it off the top of my head, i got no plan. That can lead to things such as no character developments and stuff. But i will work on that. Thanks for reading.