Review Detail of Robertp3001 in Extrasensory Perception System (EsPerS)
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Seems like an interesting story however the grammar is pretty much crap. It's better than most but still not within an acceptable level for a writer, so the story needs some major editing. There is a lot of unnecessary information without some of the necessary world building.
Extrasensory Perception System (EsPerS)
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Its review where its general info on what good and bad so not sure if hes dummy in that way. Well anyway our dear white knight i think so too that grammar needs to be on level otherwise it ruins the reading for people with hell of english hrammer because it pulls them out of any immersion they might have. Exaple they talk about bloody extremely action puppies and in middle of that ultra galaxy adrenaline action appears instead of sword apple XD
ToulueVang:Wow so smart, as if he didn’t mention it already lol dumbass