Review Detail of JavaTari in Kael Cor: A Vampire's Awakening

Also as an actual review Character Development (atleast what I’ve seen so far) is basically nonexistent. MC basically is like, oh no I did something bad, then feels bad for all of about two seconds, forgets about it, and is the exact same as before. He is angry a lot of the time, for some reason. For pretty much every character author says they have x personality but doesn’t say why, or changes there personality at all throughout chapters. The kid vampire he met who was supposed to be important basically ceased to exist in the story. The gnome became a device to give Mc home and basement while helping him mine. She also basically becomes non existent. The dwarf is just a tool to introduce his “first” wife (actually second) and build a connection to the gang. He also basically becomes nonexistent. His “first” (second) wife basically hangs around him all the time and author says how they have this deep bond and everything. Personally I just think this was an excuse to get MC a loyal and loving wife fast without any actual romance story. I skipped the second (first) wife’s story because I was lazy as hell. But from what I could gather after she loved him or something but was then forced to have intercourse with another man in front of him and have a child. Yet again, this just seems like a cheap excuse to get a second loyal loving wife but with some drama and unforgivingness from Mc. All in all character development is pretty bad The writing is okay, the random and sporadic comedy and darkness doesn’t really bother me. Slight mistakes happen often. All in all okay. The world background is also okay, but I didn’t really pay much attention to that. One of my main questions is how the hell did humanity go from being equal to the dark forces, to basically gods of the planet? Even going as far as to detain the dragons. Another question I have, is how did the training techniques get lost over time? I call bs on that. That stuff could only happen if humanity suffered a HUGE blow, and nearly became extinct. And as far as I can see, humanity is thriving and more powerful than ever. As I mentioned in my first comment, the training seems secondary and like it’s not important for the MC to become strong, when clearly it is. Another thing, idk if I misread it but it said the first stage or whatever in the mind training was the barrier for 60% of people. Does that mean EVERYONE can train in the mind? And if so why don’t they? It doesn’t seem like many do. Yet another thing, how is it possible that the humans have figured out how to restrain the WAY? It is the literal worlds life and will itself. It should be nearly impossible to apply this to ANYONE, much less to EVERYONE in the pits. And if it was that easy, then how come he hasn’t been able to figure it out yet? He may only be a beginner weaver, but the humans can’t just use weavers willy nilly on every single prisoner. YET AGAIN, should people who cast restrain on a persons life and WAY, suffer a MASSIVE attack from nature every second? They are after all trying to suppress the world itself. I may have misread some stuff. Cya

Bloody hell that's one seriously long complaint. And honestly I skipped most of it, because it's not something I've not heard before. But I understand the points you've made, and you're, right. When I first started writing this, I was no a professional(heck I arent .) but the plot at the beginning was allover the place and since there were things I couldn’t change without properly rewriting the story, I worked around them and tried to make them better and more realistic. One things I'm sure I got right from The beginning was my MCs stupidity and sometimes foolish decisions. It helped me shape him into the person he turns out to be. The harem route was a spur of the moment decision I shouldn't have made, so to solve that blunder I made them important side characters. They never lost their relevance as the story is as much about the supporting cast as the main character. Everything you've complained about, I've tried to solve down the line. And believe it wasn't easy, but I Had a lot help from my readers. They helped save my story and made me a better writer. The first three of four dozen chapters weren't really good. But I learnt to be better after, so please, I know I'm being selfish or something, but give Kael one more chance. If you get to 100 and its still bad, then you can kick it to the curb. I'm sorry the earlier chapters did not make it worth your while, but give me a chance to redeem myself, and my story. But even you disagree, thanks for reading in the first place. I'm really greatful.

Okay, sorry for kinda going on a rant, it was like 1 in the morning and I was pretty tired 😅. I’ll give it another chance, thanks.

You should put this in your summary so that people know. This should help stop people from leaving your LN. Added you're LN to my Library.

Thanks I will

Sorry to ask you, is it true about the part that MC being NTRed right in front of him or similar ? I actually interested on reading it even it's dark story but it's scared me about NTR or the likes,I honestly hate NTR part, so please enlighten me. If those disgusting part did exist I rather not reading it even it's exist only 1 chapter. It's o.k if you doesn't wish to answer this, I'm not not hatter I just hate everything about NTR and the likes, even the part about random dude raping or killing women I hate it.

Oh! To be honest I hate NTR too, to the core. But I had to come up with something that would break the MCs heart at d time. I regret using it, but it's only one chapter, and it only happens once. And not by choice as both him and his wife were forced, so I guess u could say she was raped in front of her husband. Apart from that chapter, it's never mentioned again. Please don't let it stop you from reading my novel. Thanks

I wonder which chapter is it? I wish to .. no I want to skip that chapter.

It's 36