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2018-08-27 17:19

Dude...are you 8 or something? I hate to break it to you but someone has to tell you the truth so you can improve. (1) You suck at english. Go get an editor (2) Your plot looks like it was written by a delusional child (3) The sequence or transition of scenes are way to confusing( or maybe that was just the writing style or the lack of it)

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You Fool! This is a great work of satire! don't mock his creative genius

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