Review Detail of Fiona_Singer in Duality

I started from the beginning for about seven chapters and jumped to 17th chapter like the author requested, and it is indeed a huge improvement, so it seems you are a quick learner in right direction. Good for you XD The writing is jerky--considering the author is still learning it's pretty understandable--but when reading it I don't really feel it's "bad", as in it hindered my understanding of the plots. Yes, it's bit plain, not quite enough of complexity and refinement, but it's simple and straightforward like you can understand it with a glance, making it effortless to read, which I would say may be a good thing to keep. In this part about writing style, I would suggest two things: 1. Try to get rid of some too oral or casual usage of language, for it might be acceptible for daily use, it won't be too proper for written form (I made that mistakes too sometimes XD); 2. Try to find your own style of writing, which means reading, writing and rewriting more to find a way to write that gives your work some personality. Doesn't have to be an eloquent one, just something you like and you feel like fitting your own characteristics. The story development was pretty standard reincarnation and cultivation at first, but I'm glad the author chose to better it with a more mature writing style and a more meaningful theme for the novel. Character design, too. I started very curious and hoping, since it's the first black MC novel I read on this site, and little bit disappointed when it seemed to be an ordinary webnovel work, but now I'm picking up the hope again after Chpt 17 XD. Not that I assumed black people are just always full-of-anger, but uniqueness is fundamental to literature and the topic of colors will be an interesting place to start, especially considering how white/yellow-MC predominant this website is. I'd personally look forward to the author recreating the struggle of black people in a fantasized world XD.