Review Detail of WoodenWindow in A New World
Review detail
This story is about a prodigy from the Uchiha clan who was born before the second ninja war. Unfortunately it lacks in character development and is mainly a poorly thought out wishfulfillment novel. Writing quality: The author does not seem to know what paragraphs are. This combined with long sentences makes for a poor reading experience. The grammar and spelling are not that great either but passable at least. Story development: Shortened academy arc followed by the second ninja war. Standard stuff for naruto fanfictions. After the academy thee MC seems to just go rambo on everything he meets, no matter the matchups. Higher level opponent? GO IN FOR THE KILL! Heavily outnumbered? GO IN FOR THE KILLS! Anyone with less plot armor would be a corpse already, not to mention some victories make no sense with 2vs1000 fights happening and somehow being won solely because he's the MC. On top of that he somehow gets everyone's respect cause he's awesome and keeps winning fights he has no business winning. Wish fulfillment without actual good ideas or planning from the MC, he just jumps into everything and wins by pure plot armor. Stability of updates: Chapters are frequent. Characters: The MC is a prodigy who has the goal of becoming stronger. The character itself is incredibly 2D since the MC only cares for jumping into battles and gets angry when someone he knows is hurt and does not seem to have other traits. The side characters are cardboard cutouts as well, they are mentioned by name and ninja rank but do not seem to do anything besides telling the MC to care for his friends and fight enemies. There's no humour, interesting quotes or actually developed personalities to be found. World Background: Absolutely terrible. The entire ninja village structure of the second SHINOBI war has been changed to modern army structures, somehow the villages have at least 10x more shinobi than in canon. Just to enable the MC to go on huge killing sprees everything ninja has been destroyed for easy targets. It has changed a great world background into something that makes no sense instead of adding a unique twist. Either limit changes to a functional background or make sure the characters can use the changes to add an interesting spin to the story. In this case all we get is a loss of strategy and mindgames in exchange for unbelievable fights with tons of plot armor.
A New World
SlyOW
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Honestly, i hope for your next new novel u can improve from it. No more 6 month old can walk. I can tell you this 20% of reader will not read it if they saw it. Baby bone is not strong enough in 6 month old. If baby naruto with his huge chakra and a biju inside cant walk, ur mc probably wont.
SlyOW:Thank you for the constructive review, even though it is not really a positive one, you worked on it and made a real review.
I know a child can only walk around when he is a year old, but I tried to make it like he was amazing, but it seems it was not very wise...
ReviewBrah:Honestly, i hope for your next new novel u can improve from it. No more 6 month old can walk. I can tell you this 20% of reader will not read it if they saw it. Baby bone is not strong enough in 6 month old. If baby naruto with his huge chakra and a biju inside cant walk, ur mc probably wont.
Nah its ok. Its just mean u will improve from it. Also reading every top fanfic of naruto will also polish your skill.
SlyOW:I know a child can only walk around when he is a year old, but I tried to make it like he was amazing, but it seems it was not very wise...
My little cousin was running at 10 months, he was first trying to walk at 4 months and started walking without support around 6.5 months. For me it’s not outrageous to walk by 6 months, however, to be able to understand words and not just trying to repeat them before 1 is a bit much for me. My Niece who is a bit younger than him is almost 2 and is still not understanding that only her dad is called dada.
ReviewBrah:Honestly, i hope for your next new novel u can improve from it. No more 6 month old can walk. I can tell you this 20% of reader will not read it if they saw it. Baby bone is not strong enough in 6 month old. If baby naruto with his huge chakra and a biju inside cant walk, ur mc probably wont.
Hey, it’s not all that far fetched honestly. My little cousin was running around at 10 months old, it was surprising but not impossible.
SlyOW:I know a child can only walk around when he is a year old, but I tried to make it like he was amazing, but it seems it was not very wise...
Are u smoking weed sir ? Running in 10 month is outrageous. I hope u not mixing a fantasy with reality. Because the baby bone need time to develop.
AlphonseDarkshield:My little cousin was running at 10 months, he was first trying to walk at 4 months and started walking without support around 6.5 months. For me it’s not outrageous to walk by 6 months, however, to be able to understand words and not just trying to repeat them before 1 is a bit much for me. My Niece who is a bit younger than him is almost 2 and is still not understanding that only her dad is called dada.
ReviewBrah:Are u smoking weed sir ? Running in 10 month is outrageous. I hope u not mixing a fantasy with reality. Because the baby bone need time to develop.
ReviewBrah:Are u smoking weed sir ? Running in 10 month is outrageous. I hope u not mixing a fantasy with reality. Because the baby bone need time to develop.
Ok bro,lets end this not logical conversation and instead study your little cousin. Who know he is a reincarnate one. 😊
AlphonseDarkshield:I’m not kidding, he was freakin running at 10 months. It was ridiculous.
Nah, too much of a cry baby. He wined when his mom held another baby as though he was stabbed in the gut.
ReviewBrah:Ok bro,lets end this not logical conversation and instead study your little cousin. Who know he is a reincarnate one. 😊
I’d suppose he just developed more in the physical aspect than in the mentality as he is very... foolish...... He has lived with dogs his whole short live thus far and still has difficulty realizing that the dogs dislike him because he tries to trap the in rooms or pulls on their tails.
ReviewBrah:Ok bro,lets end this not logical conversation and instead study your little cousin. Who know he is a reincarnate one. 😊
There was a documentary about the world strongest todler, he started walking at 6 mo, but the kid had like 40% more muscle density than a normal kid. ...so its possible
ReviewBrah:Honestly, i hope for your next new novel u can improve from it. No more 6 month old can walk. I can tell you this 20% of reader will not read it if they saw it. Baby bone is not strong enough in 6 month old. If baby naruto with his huge chakra and a biju inside cant walk, ur mc probably wont.
well my lil bro could only move fingers when he was 1 month old by 6 month he could only roll around by approximately 1 he could do the crawl walk by approximately 2 only he could walk😠😠😠😠😠😠. There it is realistic babu exercises😬😬😬 ok if you want to make mc seems different make the difference realistic the f**k you trying making him go walk at 6 months and the hell with the one who wrote someone he knows could walk by 6 months probably a Chinese I tell you they are crazy thinks active kids are smart, fuck it my cousin is active was active as hell and the thing the lilltle shit knows is kicking everybody shouting ""HERO PUNCH""""" yea punch picked it in some anime😡😡😡 lil turd made my life shit, now too i tell you is kicking my chair ahhhhhhhhhhhh pain of being the oldest😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭 but looks very peaceful when you see them sleeping😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊
Nah 1 year old can only crawl the too when they are super exited so if u thing chakra makes them strong them make 1 year old walk with support that too is unbelievable
SlyOW:I know a child can only walk around when he is a year old, but I tried to make it like he was amazing, but it seems it was not very wise...
