Review Detail of Sage_HiddenBear in The Heaven Defying Helping System

I was curious about this story due to it's usage of a rather different system. The Heavenly Helping system. The idea has the potential to go into justice and heroics and some psychological bits concerning said stuff, or at least that was my thoughts. Boy did I get my hopes up waaaay too high. The story is basically about a guy who gets op, loses his opness instantly, loses said OPness again the moment he reclaims it and soars up again. On top of this the story's plot makes absolutely no sense. The Helping System itself doesn't really ask him to do anything that doesn't have massive out of this world rewards, and finally the writing just absolutely sucks. I can't help but wonder when the Author will realize this needs some major rework. This s essentially the roughest of rough drafts I've seen in a long time. This should not be published right now.