Review Detail of ArgosYesu in Bleach System Within Bleach

Grammar, depth of understanding toward original characters, basic understanding toward writing scenes and plot, power growth, any care for quality. I give them all extremely low marks. It’s riddled with issues like excessive and incorrect use of capitalization and punctuation marks that seriously detract from the story. It isn’t an issue if you say the system speaks in all caps or something, but only having the first letter capitalized is a headache to read. Then you have characters scream in all caps every chapter AND use “!” in the tens to show they’re screaming incredibly loud... feels like a mess. Please pop open a wiki or even a chapter of the manga and take one or two notes on how the characters speak. Urahara screaming like the bratty MC is complete ****. Ichigo acting like a twisted freak is even worse. Then you just plain call the MC as “MC” in the narrative...