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Review Detail of PandaKun in Supreme Emperor System

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PandaKun
PandaKunLv55yrPandaKun

Its a story I would recommend, but not strongly. It has potential and will certainly be well recieved by the LitRPG groups but its pretty basic. Sure I haven't read anything identical and its an intriguing idea but it isn't fast enough to make one hooked. I read the 15 chapters and I loved it but when the updates are like they are(1 chapter everyday or two) its simply hard to hold the same interest as a large chapter everyday. I'm not saying that its a bad pace especially since I have experience writing and I know how hard it is to keep writing while life is going on. The character developement is a tad bland but this isnt a professional book. It seems like the MC was adapting way to quickly and accepting a crazy thing like it was an everyday occurrence. He acted vicious in one chapter to someone who did something nonsensical to the MC but it wasn't that made sense. The world is made to be similar to the real world and even recently(chapter 22 for me) included a real event with some large company but it seemed slightly exaggerated. Not that it is negative to point out. Overall I hope it gets more popular and gets some better pointers and the Author improves the story. Good Luck! I'll be in the shadows lurking like always!

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Supreme Emperor System

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Red_Tempest
Red_TempestAuthorRed_Tempest

Thank you for the review and the tips. Can you specify what you were referring to by vicious response to nonsensical action? I just want to improve in the future.

PandaKun
PandaKunLv5PandaKun

So the CEO of the Casino, who yes is supposed to be the quick antagonist does something that makes little sense. Sure big companies would be harsh to winners but why risk their reputation for being a good casino simply to break someone's hands and junk their car. Then when the MC fights back with the hiest business, it does seem to be a happy ending for the MC but why would he have been as kind as to only steal the money? The MC did an excellent job of making everything go right during the hiest, but the handscanner wasn't mentioned until after he broke into the house of the CEO. Then also why would the police think that the CEO stole the money? Cause a vault that is supposed to only be open able by a hand (that belongs to the recently knocked outed CEO) (Quick note if someone is knocked out for an extended period of time, I think it's over 10 minutes they risk permanent brain damage. I cant recall if the gaurds were knocked out that long.) Overall the antagonist during those chapters and the MCs response seemed odd and robotic. But it was still a decent couple of chapters. Typing this from mobile so its probably not well written since the app succs

Red_Tempest:Thank you for the review and the tips. Can you specify what you were referring to by vicious response to nonsensical action? I just want to improve in the future.
KoFu_
KoFu_Lv6KoFu_

First Actual review I read on this novel! Thanks for giving me an idea of the novel before actually reading it!

kobeblackmamba
kobeblackmambaLv7kobeblackmamba

Hey man when you realease next chapter?

Red_Tempest:Thank you for the review and the tips. Can you specify what you were referring to by vicious response to nonsensical action? I just want to improve in the future.