Review Detail of Jaeeee in Rebirth: Living as Naruto(Dropped)
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This review is pretty harsh and contains spoilers. Basically SI Naruto learns the Rasengan and Flying Thunder God Jutsu before becoming Kakashi’s student. When Kakashi learns of this, he just brushes of the fact the naruto learned the rasengan (A rank jutsu) by doing chakra exercises and the flying thunder god jutsu using the forbidden scroll. Really?! A S-rank jutsu that not even Jiraiya (sealmaster) knows can be learned willy-nilly by an academy student?! And Kakashi just accepted that reason? Not to mention that this SI demanded to be a Frog summoner upon meeting Jiraiya for the first time and Jiraiya goes “okay fine, here.”. The author is just giving the SI jutsus and skills expecting the other characters to accept it just like that. This fanfic needs a major rewrite. Author needs to make the reactions and conversation of the characters more realistic. Also, the story is going too fast. The author blew past the First C-rank mission in 2 chapters with little conversations. Frankly, this story does not deserve a rating greater than 3.0, and that’s me being generous. P.S. If the author reads this then know that this is just my opinion. I hope you can get something out of this to improve your future stories.
Rebirth: Living as Naruto(Dropped)
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I agree, But the way the author has written the series of events does not even make sense. It lacks depth. If a Naruto fan read this, they would immediately raise their eyebrow because the author made the MC powerful just for the sake of being this OP MC that can easily beat anyone. The story became more of a self-fulfillment story. Now, I am not against an OP MC but the author has written each event too simply and too fast to set the rhythm. If we follow this trend of the MC getting OP jutsus then the Antagonists would be simply too weak to even land a hit on him or the they would get their own random OP jutsus as well. The author will then soon ran out of ways to balance the power and would simply allow the MC to end the Naruto plot i.e. using Hiraishin and what ever OP jutsus to kill Obito or Zetsu. Again, this is just my opinion on what the story will be based on the 22 chapters I’ve read. I lost all interest in this fic after that.
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I agree that learning s rank jutsu like flying raijin from the scroll in short amount of time is impossible but he did get this from God of Mischief so nothing wrong with that. As for Kakashi believing that excuse doesn't matter because on the grand scale I don't see Kakashi as an important character in this novel so it doesn't matter. As fanfiction are meant to be wish fulfillment you shouldn't put logic here and fuss about the small stuff.
Heh if u think like that it's better for ya to make your own fanfic base on what your wanted,fanfic novel was a field to fulfill the wish of the author it's a way of entertainment for the reader and the writer,the important thing is just to enjoy it if you like it you can support the author with your power stone! If dislike it just don't read it.
I agree with your logic But the story is still interesting with this development This is how human creativity work, to make an interesting story although sometimes without logic and reason or realistic Like naruto or one peace, did you think a stupid man can be strong and life in the world where killing is a normal thing? Or just with bul*s*ith no jutsu someone can make another change their view point and their way of life? The plot twist and lucky faktor still in naruto and one peace story, but people still interested to read it Why?
Jaeeee:I agree, But the way the author has written the series of events does not even make sense. It lacks depth. If a Naruto fan read this, they would immediately raise their eyebrow because the author made the MC powerful just for the sake of being this OP MC that can easily beat anyone. The story became more of a self-fulfillment story. Now, I am not against an OP MC but the author has written each event too simply and too fast to set the rhythm. If we follow this trend of the MC getting OP jutsus then the Antagonists would be simply too weak to even land a hit on him or the they would get their own random OP jutsus as well. The author will then soon ran out of ways to balance the power and would simply allow the MC to end the Naruto plot i.e. using Hiraishin and what ever OP jutsus to kill Obito or Zetsu. Again, this is just my opinion on what the story will be based on the 22 chapters I’ve read. I lost all interest in this fic after that.
You are right about no constraint, but as a story there need to be some logical human thinking in it. If you think there doesn't need to be logical and natural human thinking then you are basically saying that an author can change the human way of thinking, and this is what he is doing here. Of course I hae nothing to say with him changing this as we already are full of imperfections but I think he should say it. But honestly here I think it is more about him not really understanding the human mind and trying to manipulate it without knowing much. Of course this is what all amators authors are doing(including me maybe I can't judge myself ut I don't think I am special on this point) But you can also take everything I have written for some things that a 16 years old boy wrote to impress others. By the way author, if you are reading this, then good luck and I hope you will corect this aspect and then become a successful autor.
gingerghostflewby:Mate it's a fanfic please stop trying to apply such constraints when the whole point of this is to let the author's imagination run wild in the world of naruto. Plus this is much more reasonable than most other fanfics.
lazyleo:I agree that learning s rank jutsu like flying raijin from the scroll in short amount of time is impossible but he did get this from God of Mischief so nothing wrong with that. As for Kakashi believing that excuse doesn't matter because on the grand scale I don't see Kakashi as an important character in this novel so it doesn't matter. As fanfiction are meant to be wish fulfillment you shouldn't put logic here and fuss about the small stuff.
SaikoYonebayashi:Heh if u think like that it's better for ya to make your own fanfic base on what your wanted,fanfic novel was a field to fulfill the wish of the author it's a way of entertainment for the reader and the writer,the important thing is just to enjoy it if you like it you can support the author with your power stone! If dislike it just don't read it.
Because people are idiots, ******. They do not even know what human mind is in the beginning, so how can they critic something they don't understand? But you are right about a thing, that is people can like things they don't understand, that is human nature, just like curiosity. In fact it is some curiosity there soooooo... Bye
fart_from_heaven:I agree with your logic But the story is still interesting with this development This is how human creativity work, to make an interesting story although sometimes without logic and reason or realistic Like naruto or one peace, did you think a stupid man can be strong and life in the world where killing is a normal thing? Or just with bul*s*ith no jutsu someone can make another change their view point and their way of life? The plot twist and lucky faktor still in naruto and one peace story, but people still interested to read it Why?
