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trigger warnings: sexual assault, sexism, cringe, and run on sentences. First, this novel doesn't deserve the high score it has. After reading Doomsday Pillars ( same author of Earth's Greatest Magus) I like kingdom building apocalypse novels. While I can forgive a few mistakes in writing here and there, the constant run on sentences make it difficult to read. Add spelling and grammar going out the window, and you've got a novel that feels like it wasn't even put through a basic word processor. Next, characters. MC is a typical OP dude, which I'm not against. And from what is being built in the narrative, a potential harem. Also not an automatic bad thing. But if your romance interests are literal prizes for quests who accept being kissed by a stranger they met not even a few minutes ago, I'm gonna have to call sexual assault. And no, having them resist at first then melt into the kiss doesn't count. That doesn't happen in the real world. The MC is cringe and bland. Even jokes about him being cringe fall flat. Let's not leave out the fact that he separated the men and women of the families he rescued to see if any of the men were "dead weight" by tossing them into the middle of a zombie apocalypse. Sure, he gave them sniper cover, but it really gave off a vibe of just letting them die till he remembered his new girlfriend might get upset at him if that happened. Even the men comment on this thinking it's fine that their lives are hanging by some random dudes want for his write in girlfriend. Did I forget that he literally wrote in some spam-esque survey for the situation of the novel and the love interests were just some celebrities he wanted to bang? Just "Who do you wanna be your girlfriend? Oh, XXXX celebrity cuz they are hot. Great! Here you go!" World-building is terrible. First, it was three months till the apocalypse. Then, it was 3 days. Then it was three hours. In total I think a little over two days went by till the apocalypse started. I say I think because it's hard to keep track with the terrible writing taking up brain space to decide what's going on. What could have been a great opportunity for setting up a novel where the MC has to be clever in gathering supplies, people, and other stuff to set up a good base is wasted. It feels like the author had an idea but didn't want to bother writing it. So we just get some random off screen reasons on why the timer goes down instead. TL;DR skip this novel. I've read better trash than this and still dropped those novels.

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Doomsday pillar is suck lolz, how can you said doomsday pillar so good. I guess you are kiddo with no brain đŸ˜