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Geneses1
Geneses1Lv145yr
2019-08-02 07:38

I like the idea of this novel, in the beginning it was enjoyable but currently I'm in chapter 97 and it no longer existing, when he found out the the royal family has more mutant he didn't pursue down to the better lab to get it's data and equipment, when he found out you can make your own skill without wasting zombie money he just ignores it, I especially hate in the beginning were instead of chosing weapons mastery he chooses the plane route I just thought idiot. In conclusion I wish you would up the MC's intelligence by a lot.

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Hello Fellow Daoist! If you're new, I'm sure you're here in the Review Section to see if the story is actually worth reading, right? Honestly though, the early chapters are really crappy especially Chapters between 1 and 20 or maybe even more. Why? Well, I created this just for fun so I never really had a plot prepared when I started writing this so I just wrote what ever ideas that pops out in my mind. What I didn't expect is that I would actually get a contract for it because you know~..the story was just out of a hobby, right? So to those new readers out there, if you could at least get past maybe around chapter 30 or 40? I could at least tell you that the story slowly gets better and better. After all, I'm just a noob writer with almost no experience in writing novels. And if you read past those chapters that I mentioned above but you think that story is still the same like it didn't even have a change? Then maybe it isn't your cup of tea after all, sorry. Anyway, best of luck to us! ^_^ Peace! \/ NOTE: For the last time! It was clearly mentioned that weapons bought from the [System] or weapons created after the purging are the only usable weapons and weapons after WWII is a no no. NOTE TWO: You would only comment about modern weapons being a plot hole if you just skimmed or didn't even read the early chapters at all. Important Note: I will delete reviews that just rants about the story flow in the early chapters because it didn't go what they wanted it. Please leave reviews with constructed criticism that points out mistakes in the story where it needs improvement. Keep in mind that the story was only written as hobby before it was contracted, so I just wrote whatever comes to my mind. P.S the Stronghold needed to be built in a place indicated by the [System] on his map, it can't be just built anywhere the MC wanted. God, I'm tired of explaining ****! Just read the fucking whole chapters from 1 to 10, all of it was explained there! So stop being a brat and write your own if the story doesn't go the way you wanted it!

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trigger warnings: sexual assault, sexism, cringe, and run on sentences. First, this novel doesn't deserve the high score it has. After reading Doomsday Pillars ( same author of Earth's Greatest Magus) I like kingdom building apocalypse novels. While I can forgive a few mistakes in writing here and there, the constant run on sentences make it difficult to read. Add spelling and grammar going out the window, and you've got a novel that feels like it wasn't even put through a basic word processor. Next, characters. MC is a typical OP dude, which I'm not against. And from what is being built in the narrative, a potential harem. Also not an automatic bad thing. But if your romance interests are literal prizes for quests who accept being kissed by a stranger they met not even a few minutes ago, I'm gonna have to call sexual assault. And no, having them resist at first then melt into the kiss doesn't count. That doesn't happen in the real world. The MC is cringe and bland. Even jokes about him being cringe fall flat. Let's not leave out the fact that he separated the men and women of the families he rescued to see if any of the men were "dead weight" by tossing them into the middle of a zombie apocalypse. Sure, he gave them sniper cover, but it really gave off a vibe of just letting them die till he remembered his new girlfriend might get upset at him if that happened. Even the men comment on this thinking it's fine that their lives are hanging by some random dudes want for his write in girlfriend. Did I forget that he literally wrote in some spam-esque survey for the situation of the novel and the love interests were just some celebrities he wanted to bang? Just "Who do you wanna be your girlfriend? Oh, XXXX celebrity cuz they are hot. Great! Here you go!" World-building is terrible. First, it was three months till the apocalypse. Then, it was 3 days. Then it was three hours. In total I think a little over two days went by till the apocalypse started. I say I think because it's hard to keep track with the terrible writing taking up brain space to decide what's going on. What could have been a great opportunity for setting up a novel where the MC has to be clever in gathering supplies, people, and other stuff to set up a good base is wasted. It feels like the author had an idea but didn't want to bother writing it. So we just get some random off screen reasons on why the timer goes down instead. TL;DR skip this novel. I've read better trash than this and still dropped those novels.

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