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Randomguy791
Randomguy791Lv55yr
2019-01-12 16:30

One of the few gaming novels out there with the MC taking a magic route instead of warriors/thief so i had high hopes for it. However, there is too little description that the story seems all over the place. It seems to me that the author has the image in his head but somewhat fails to transfer that into his writing. I don't need massive info dumps but the lack of details during battle as well as the surrounding area makes it hard to imagine what is going on. That in turn doesn't draw me into the story because i can't picture it. It is still early so perhaps that will improve. I also hope we learn more about the world, real and in game. We don't know anything about the MC aside from the fact that he works in a company with beauties and a friend and that he is good at his class in a game to pay for his sister's medical bills. right now, this is the type of novel you read if you got nothing else to read. or you skim through it because the little descriptions doesn't draw you in enough. i hope this improves because this does show potential.

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You may enjoy I Am the God of Games in the trial read. Check it out!

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InterestingTed
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Here's the deal, this is my second review of the novel since January 8th and an update on my previous thoughts. Imagine being introduced to an interesting world and concept in a deceptively unique way and getting hyped for the direction in which the novel may take. Now imagine that it doesn't stop introducing you... This novel feels like you're reading a summary to what happens in a much better novel of the same name. /MC or the Protagonist: /goes into dungeon alone, shows off his amazing skills (wowzers) then wins. MC gets into another impossibly difficult encounter with an incredibly powerful foe, MC wins again, except this time he has 5 people to clap for him as he struts about doing so. The novel spends too much time explaining how great the protagonist is and not enough time giving the reader what they really want... in other words, the mash and potatoes known as character development. Most of the enemies are virtually reduced to numbers and hit markers, which would be fine if the entire story didn't revolve around killing them. It's like reading a play by play of a World of warcraft raid. No ******* whether they win or lose as there happens to be a reviving function as it's a video game. Alas I got side tracted let's return to a previous point of mine. Making a character op is not really a huge bother for me. If it's done right. The problem is, the author has him acting and being treated like a haughty playground kindergartner who found out that he's really good at 4 square for the precise reason that no one else can jump. He has characters mentioning his op gaming prowess as his weird smarts or crazy intelligence when all he truly does is use a spell that he created before we even began reading the novel. Thus leaving us to contemplate whether he even made the damn thing because he doesn't show this "skill" again, atleast not til where I stopped. /World:/ why does he play this game, where'd he get it, what are the game rules, how come it's so popular that money in game is equivalent to real money, when is this taking place and who the **** is the sister he is supposed to be motivated to save? You can expect none of these questions to be answered as it seems the author is more keen to throw more giant numbers at the MC and then praise him for defeating them. That's it... really seriously that's all the story amounts to. All his relationships are based off of his incredible gaming prowess and they reek of something stank. I am just so annoyed by this Novel as it grabbed my attention and then became content to sit in it's own filth as it eventually smelled of rot.

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