Review Detail of MasochisticMonk in Number One Dungeon Supplier

While the plot, characters and world setting sound absolutely amazing, I find it just unbearable to read. Grammar is passable, but there's 0 flow in the writing. It's like having amazing ideas but none of the skills to execute them. Random conversations happen that have no relation to the current scene (or maybe just added as an afterthought by the author? that's supposed to give a little bit of insight to character quirks? unfortunately, it's done so badly...) I have a HUGE problem with the pacing and flow of the story (at 6!!! chapters!!!) so while the story really, genuinely sounds interesting, I just can't pick it up. ( T T ) Disclaimer: I'm not that good at English myself, but I'm a very picky reader. It's just how I feel (shrug)