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Valloncur
ValloncurLv135yr
2020-01-29 08:39

Short: The Story is vast, which makes it pretty expensive to read, but most of the time it is a good read. The Character makes a 180° somewhere in the early 100s Chapter but otherwise is pretty consistent. Lengthy chapters in the 600s chapters to artificially legthen the story. Writing Quality: The Author is often to forced in his writing, which makes Chapters not that good, but most of the times he gets it done right. After chapter 600 it started to get artificially extended explanations and descriptions. Which serve no real purpose (character or world building) Stability of Updates: The Author tries to hard to match with the requests of his readers to release chapters fast, this in turn did dimish the quality of his writing as above stated. It might be a lack of Editing, but chapters feel about 30% longer than they should be After ca. The 600s chapter. Story Development: The story developes on a steady pace, in my sight a bit to slow, espacially After chapter 600, with to many inbetween chapters that serve not much purpose. But this is not my choice, its the authors choice. This makes the story an expansive read tough. World Background: The World is vast, the author even adds more to it by a method of the System the Maincharacter uses. Is the World fleshed out? not even close, there are still so many Questions about Jin's world and this with 630 chapters into the story.

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Devils_Advocate
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Around chapter 600s was right about when I, the editor had to take a break because my final exams came up. I am back now, so my editing 'quality' if you don't mind me calling it that has returned. ;)

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I've been looking for a good Dungeon Lord themed novel on this site, something similar to 'My House of Horrors'. I finally found one! Thanks for your hard work, dear author! I've never imagined the dungeon lord trope being crossed with the magic shop trope, so this is an incredibly awesome find for me. What's more is that the MC is not an asocial asshole, haha! What makes this different from the average cultivator-system novel? Several things, I imagine. To me, one of its outstanding features is the adoption of mini-arcs for the minor characters. As far as I know, minor character arcs are nearly exclusive to Japanese light novels. Western novels use the technique too but they don't give the same treatment. So, the character development of minor characters in this story is excellent! Even the dungeon monsters have backstories. The dear author may be an otaku, haha! There are a number of references to Japanese fandoms and comparatively fewer to the Chinese side of things. Dear author, Ranma may be the Best but even he will acknowledge the sheer Awesomeness that is Ip Man! Another cool thing: cultivators in NODS are not immortal gods. there are in fact legal and traditional precedents that allow cultivators and non-cultivators to live in open harmony, which includes the fact that everyone in the world is capable of cultivating. Some people just choose not too. I'd almost say this was a way to nerf the traditional cultivator model if the resurrection system had not been included. Yet another cool thing: the NODS shop uses the latest trends in communications like QR codes and NFC protocols. There are a lot of stories that talk about 'latest technology' and yet the most advanced tech they show is WiFi and phone apps. What the hell, right? The NODS shop also talks about store credits, in-store apps, personalized shop rewards and promos, streaming and pay-per-view services...insidious things. No one does consumerism like America! There were even a couple of chapters when the in-store rewards and promos discussion took over the story from the dungeons. Seriously. Maybe not so much description about the shop mechanics and more about the people. Despite shop-filler chapters, the story manages to a modicum of momentum past a hundred chapters, where it again picks up. Ahh, why is the level of tech in this shop not standard worldwide? If this level of functionality can be done with my phone, I will happily never leave my bed again. The initial premise of the story means there's something for every one: monster capturing, system leveling, some food critiquing, some romance, party and raid battling, cultivation, business management, dungeon creation, infinite world theory, etc. The shop logistics is influenced by other store- theme novels here but it manages to exude its own charm. The use of pocket dimensions to expand and include shop services is great! You know, this is the first MC I've read to be smacked down verbally for blindly following missions instead of actively participating in his own life by the shard of his mother's soul animated by the System into being an interface navigation assistant. A hundred and thirty chapters in and no revenge schemes and blood feuds (yet, anyway), which is kind of refreshing. The customers and the dungeon monsters are starting to shine even more. I think some minor characters have more fans than the MC at this point. Definitely a recommended read.

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