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AlexzY
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The FF started great, but quickly the MC dies to give way to another character who gets all the advantages that our MC should have. There is a lot of information in the chapters, If the subject is ... I do not know... Daggers! The author begins to explain everything about the daggers from the way that they are used, which materials are the best for their manufacture, all in one or two chapters, to the beginning is fine since it introduces you to the world, but after many chapters it becomes heavy, apart from that they throw the MC in the dark to introduce you to another when he was already dead, if he is dead, leave him like that, the one who called my attention to read the FF, it was the first MC not the second and I just kept reading with the hope that he would dominate the body and Arthur would disappear since he didn't interest me. It became desperate for me not to see Atiqo anywhere and when him appears it is not satisfactory... Author you should decide, keep Arthur or Atiqo, or change the first chapters and sipnosis to erase Atiqo and just be Arthur's adventure as You're showing 1.-3 [D] 2.-2 [E] 3.-5 [A+] 4.-4 [B] 4.-4 [B+]

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Pokemon Untold [2023]

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FleetingClouds
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Thank you for the review ;), what do you mean with daggers? I will try to constantly improve this FF for future and past chapters, but I have decided to keep Arthur. I hope you will do another review after another 100 chapters to compare :) But I think he is an important anchore to make this world feel more realistic, from Atiqo's perspective everything looks fantastical and bright, so I wanted someone to balance him. I hope I can make this better in the future :)

AlexzY
AlexzYLv3AlexzY

The daggers were an example of how you put a lot of information into one chapter when you can give us that info by pieces in different chapters. And... It's okay, with your decision because it is your ff, so do the things that make you feel better with yourself.