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Review Detail of Esra01 in Rise of The Undead Legion

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Esra01
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First of all this review would point out the negative aspects of this novel since there's plenty of positives one already. For the most part Rise of the Undead Legion has a solid foundation with characters and world design. But sadly the quality and story development isn't that great. 1. Writing Quality + Story Development The story development at first 100 ch is pretty enjoyable although it's not a masterpiece it's still a nice morning read that would leave you wanting more. But, after that the story took a massive hit to its quality so much that if i reviewed the later chapter i would rate it as 1/5. The story in the first arc of rebuilding the undead legion is very good. I'm really immersed in how the MC slowly builds up his army and power. His story of roaming around the world collecting strong capable undead are enjoyable. But after it's just meh. For the 100 ++ ch, the story keeps giving more and more obstacle for our MC to solve. The obstacle itself is not a problem since it presents a real trouble that even makes me wonder if our MC could solve it or not. But, the way he solved it are always anticlimatic, every single boss fight at later chapter always leave me saying "That's it?". For example there are 2 major bosses in 200++ ch that is killed with a lucky coincidence and a lucky instant hit kill. There's always a huge build up for each of those bosses but somehow it always ends with our MC getting a 1% instant kill chance or a lucky coincidence negating all of the ******* that the author builds up towards it. Totally unrewarding for the readers. It really boggles my mind when the author decided to kill a boss in a single chapter in a totally anti-climatic way. The boss has been build up as a stalking predator that could assassinate the MC at any time. But, since our MC received a major power up the boss just got used as a punching bag. I mean c'mon you already build up the fight with this boss for 100 chapters! And he got killed in a single chapter. And also it seems like the author is in a rush to finish the story(?).There are a few major arc that just happens. Like for example the story needs our MC to do this 5 task so he just did the 5 task with no actual problem in doing it. And sometime during the fights that are sprinkled in during the quest that absolutely have no ******* at all the author suddenly said "Oh yeah he's at 1% health" to create artificial sense of urgency. Plus some of the power up during later chapter are totally undeserved. For example, there's a problem about the lack of boats. So suddenly our MC has the capability of building boats in the next chapter. And suddenly in the next chapter he's building the best legendary boat since the boatyard coincidentally has the guy that build the legendary boat during his life as a human. Yeah.... that's kinda pushing it That problem above has occurred lots of times during the story. The MC has a problem of reach when he is mounted. So the blacksmith in the next chapter has a legendary glaive that he could buy. Then MC has a problem of obtaining the blood of a lvl 999 monster. Yeah the monster is selling it in exchange for something that the MC is already producing. Wait he doesn't have enough? Worry not the monster accept loans without any interest. 2. Stability of Updates In my experience it's quite stable. 1 ch/day is enough for this kind of novel. Nothing interesting to review in this part 3. Character Design The novel has tons of unique characters that I think are very interesting to read. Each of them has an unique characteristic and design that I think other novel could take this novel as an example on how to create an interesting character. But during fights the story really struggles in making them look useful, especially the parts that includes the undead army. 4. World Background For the undead world the author did a really great job in creating a believable environment for our skeleton guy to wander around and have an adventure. But sadly some of the times in the living world some places feels like they are just plopped there since they are not that well developed except for the Wild region. ---- End of the review ---- Also the during equipment upgrade part the author really loves copy and pasting the same exact paragraph 5 times. Although it's how an equipment is presented in MMO it's still pretty strange looking at the same exact paragraph 5 times in a row. This problem still exists in the later chapter, quite weird since I think the readers would complain about it already Also the during equipment upgrade part the author really loves copy and pasting the same exact paragraph 5 times. Although it's how an equipment is presented in VRMMO it's still pretty strange looking at the same exact paragraph 5 times in a row. This problem still exists in the later chapter, quite weird since I think the readers would complain about it already Also the during equipment upgrade part the author really loves copy and pasting the same exact paragraph 5 times. Although it's how an equipment is presented in VRMMO it's still pretty strange looking at the same exact paragraph 5 times in a row. This problem still exists in the later chapter, quite weird since I think the readers would complain about it already Also the during equipment upgrade part the author really loves copy and pasting the same exact paragraph 5 times. Although it's how an equipment is presented in VRMMO it's still pretty strange looking at the same exact paragraph 5 times in a row. This problem still exists in the later chapter, quite weird since I think the readers would complain about it already Also the during equipment upgrade part the author really loves copy and pasting the same exact paragraph 5 times. Although it's how an equipment is presented in VRMMO it's still pretty strange looking at the same exact paragraph 5 times in a row. This problem still exists in the later chapter, quite weird since I think the readers would complain about it already

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Tennouji_Kotarou
Tennouji_KotarouLv4Tennouji_Kotarou

this is that novel where the author forces a girl who likes Mc to be with his friend, just because he doesn't want a harem?

SageDrunkKitty
SageDrunkKittyLv6SageDrunkKitty

Chapter 1 is decent, but still has issues. If the girl’s family can casually hand out a million as compensation, there’s no way that the bodyguards of the “princess” of the family would be complete trash. Chapter 2 is a train wreck. Mainly because I actually care about the small details. This review is about chapter 2, well, technically chapter 2 and 3. According to the author’s note, there was an issue while uploading chapters, so chapter 2 and 4 was posted. As a solution, the author decided to edit chapter 2, and pasted chapter 3 onto the bottom with the reason “so it wouldn’t affect the later chapters.” If you could edit chapters, couldn’t you replace chapter 4 with chapter 3? A good majority of the readers are confused cause they have no idea about the missing chapter, and the author never bothered to mention it in an author’s note in future chapters. Anyways, chapter 2 is a mess. The author also deletes reviews below 4 stars to manipulate the novel’s rating. Pointless chapter. Could be summed up in a few paragraphs. Multiple paragraphs of characters repeating what each other says. Multiple massive 5-6 paragraph long info dumps which kills the immersion in the story. Info is meant to be revealed over time, not forced down our throats all at once. Character dialogue unrealistic. Friend: “You can earn money playing this game.” MC: “What? I can earn money playing a game?” Friend: “Yes, you can earn money!” MC: “Yay! I can earn money!” Friend: “One gold coin for one real life dollar.” MC: “I’m a normal person, so I’ll waste 3 sentences repeating that bit of info because I can break the 4th wall and I know that the readers are idiots. So I need to repeat everything my best pal says just so the readers can remember the info.” Instead of feeling like a normal conversation between best friends, it feels completely fake. Like an act put on just to give the audience another info dump. Yes, he did research to maximize money earning, and that’s why he spent multiple paragraphs talking about kingdoms and guilds. Yet he couldn’t even give a reason for why he chose human over the other races during character creation. He wants to be a tank. A bloody tank. Also, he wants to be a solo player. He’s broke, and playing the game to exchange game money for real money. How does he expect to farm monsters efficiently as a solo player who’s a tank that does poor dps? What was the point of doing research if he’s not going to use his brain? Stop switching between kingdom, empire, and empire wannabe when referring to the Eastern Region. Inconsistency is annoying. For that Korean guild that’s in the top 3, why does the guild leader have a Chinese username? Why does the MC feel the need to robotically state his next set of actions out loud? “I’ve played games my entire childhood and that’s why I’m gonna say, ‘AS A NEWBIE I NEED EQUIPMENT! IN WHICH CASE, I NEED TO DO THE STARTER QUEST TO GET EQUIPMENT!! WHICH IS WHY I’M GOING TO DO THE STARTER QUEST NOW!!’ Oh, the reason why I’m saying all of that? That’s because I’m a normal person who feels the need to explain all my actions to my imaginary audience of idiots who don’t even know that in games, you get equipment by doing the tutorial/starter quest.” Why does the MC not have a plan after doing all that research, and randomly changes his actions and statements on a whim? “Hey, I see him! That’s the tutorial NPC! Charge!! Halfway there now, just 5 more steps... I’m so close.... wait, stop. I have a map. Yes, I see my map icon. It’s right there. Not there, yes, there. The floating icons at the edge of my vision. Let’s open my map. Lemme give you another 3 paragraphs on the town’s layout, features, and why there’s so few players around. Now back to the story. Oh, did I just say that I must do the tutorial in order to get equipment? Nope! Actually, I’m heading off to the trading grounds! I’ll train

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Joswilaney
JoswilaneyLv12Joswilaney

haha, your copy+paste skillz are strong 🤣