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Jason_Walder
Jason_WalderLv115yr
2020-03-29 15:03

First, I have read the novel...up to chapter 229 actually, I only created this account to write this review because I cannot remember my other one's password and do not have access to it at this time. First, I will say that you had a great story going for the first 200 chapters or so. Then, you decided that the mc needed a "bump" in the road. I'm all for that, but not when the "bump" destroys literally all 200 chapters before it. LIterally, undead legion...gone...endgame villain...gone...gods we have never heard of or been hinted at...here? I feel that was a poorly planned bump and I feel no motivation to read after he lost the king, the abyssal knights, his original goal, his boyz, everything. At first I thought he would get it back, but then in chapter 213-215 suddenly Zoe isn't even the main love interest anymore. Vanessa, who was only mentioned like twice, is suddenly who he seems to like because he is too stupid to realize Zoe likes him. Nobody is that dumb...come on. Then Mercy even becomes one too? Really? The interesting love interest built up masterfully for 200 chapters no longer seem so to matter. His work is all gone....I'm sorry but even if he gets everything back it will feel fake. A bump is good, but if it destroys everything before it then it was not well done. Sorry but I'm gonna have to quit reading, please enjoy your passion and continue your work.

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Biako
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Not gonna spoil you, but everything is planned that way since the beginning. It's hinted at from the story's name, please keep reading you'll regret ever stopping bro. trust me.

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ur_stupidity
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Alright. So a new review is needed. Especially since this is now developed into a pay and premium type story. However, of all the VRMMO stories on here, this is among the top worthy of SS. Some may say it’s just an ******* work, but it honestly stands above and apart many of the translated works. Here’s why: (yes it’s long cus it’s honest) 1. The writing quality is excellent in grammar and spelling with tons of modern literature, video game and movie references that fit so smoothly and make the story enjoyable. Instead of being cliche it fits just right in the moment and makes you smile and laugh. The dialogue is not too lengthy as to be boring and yet always adds life to the characters and shows insight into their characteristics, histories and relationships. It is also consistent, even as the characters develop and change/grow the dialogue continues to match. 2. The updates are steady. While there isn’t a bunch of mass releases due to it being written practically live by the author, you get your daily fix and if you are that addicted then go privileged for a good headstart. As a written piece rather than translated piece this is by far the most important quality of the author. It shows dedication and that the story will not be abandoned anytime soon. 3. The story development is unpredictable yet natural, with a good mix of cliffhangers and plot twists. Good luck and bad luck are there in spades without the need for OP MC. Which is a refreshing break from all the rest of the VRMMO novels that are like clones. It has all the great elements of a VRMMO such as NPC realism/comedy, realistic updates/character nerfing (lol. Oh so real for online games) and bug management (because honestly if you are OPing someone game then AI/moderators should be looking at you which is biggest bull**** of most VRMMO), real interaction/consequences between game and life, not too bogged down in stats /game details, struggles both in game and in real life (some of which are beyond the MC control and capability to fix), romance without too over dense characters or super maxed charm and beauty for every character, lots of comedy without having to be overly dependent on face slapping (yes library of heaven path which was written on repeat every chapter), and most of all simultaneous story developments that twist, flashback keep you in a rollercoaster with a mix of pace that is easy to be comfortable with and doesn’t force events/development. 4. The character development is the only one I marked as 4, but that’s only cus the damn author made so many interesting characters that I’m honestly deep in anticipation of their development and future influence. Especially in RL. But of course RL moves slower than game cus RL is always just like that. The game characters however are full paced and well developed with just enough details to make them lovable but with the hidden potential to surprise you and become a plot development. Underestimate nobody. There is no cliche characters so far, although at the beginning it seemed like it might go that way. Honestly, it feels like the author development grew at some point and so did the characters or something. But he avoided potential pitfalls. Character relations also change a lot but in realistic ways as we would with ppl who we consider old/new to our lives. And there is character conflict both large and small. Lol. The scenarios they also end up in with eachother are a smooth flow as well as their reactions. The NPCs are so damn lovable and their is a clear distinction in the feel of the story between the MC with players and NPCs that neither one feels useless and that could be left out. I’m just saying that if you are a big addict to RL development then you may be a little frustrated. Lol. But it’s VRMMO story so that’s what it’s all about and that aspect will develop at a higher pace naturally. 5. I’m out of space. But it’s damn awesome. So get to reading already.

unannoymous
unannoymousLv11

- - - - 200 chapter review - - - - Take into account: - The novel is written by a guy like you or me, not a Japanese manga team. - The Author gets paid by people’s donations and stones, and with that has written hundreds of chapters. Negatives; - The first part of the novel (up to 56-80ish) is riddled with errors and inconsistencies, often dramatically breaking the feeling of immersion. It gives the impression that the Author was personally just scrapping by with his novel, and not thinking everything through. - The first portion also is pretty cliché in its story, (but would yours be better? 🤷‍♂️). - Lots of the later chapters are premium, but that’s typical with novels now, the chapters also vastly vary in size at that point. Positives: - For being a video game plot, the story elements come across as fresh, even with the cliché under-developed presentations. - Even though typical ‘emotional bait’ was used, I couldn’t help but get really angry and involved in the negative events happening to the MC. Mostly I felt more invested in the MC’s real life than in his game life, which is fine! 👍 - The writing quality of the later chapters really improves and you can’t help but realize that the Author actually has great talent. ((Good job Author)) - I didn’t think this would be another ‘daily addiction’ novel by the time I finished, but I was wrong. —- ((AUTHOR: Don’t take what people say here so seriously, the positive or the negative. You just write the story for yourself and find some irl buds to get your positive feedback from. Humans with the internet’s anonymity will say some awful, hateful things, without thinking twice. Plus, the internet has some mentally messed up people who get angry for no reason. Personally I have some cool friends through board games, there are usually local clubs most places. The goal being finding people who you can relate to without a screen between you.))

Esra01
Esra01Lv6

First of all this review would point out the negative aspects of this novel since there's plenty of positives one already. For the most part Rise of the Undead Legion has a solid foundation with characters and world design. But sadly the quality and story development isn't that great. 1. Writing Quality + Story Development The story development at first 100 ch is pretty enjoyable although it's not a masterpiece it's still a nice morning read that would leave you wanting more. But, after that the story took a massive hit to its quality so much that if i reviewed the later chapter i would rate it as 1/5. The story in the first arc of rebuilding the undead legion is very good. I'm really immersed in how the MC slowly builds up his army and power. His story of roaming around the world collecting strong capable undead are enjoyable. But after it's just meh. For the 100 ++ ch, the story keeps giving more and more obstacle for our MC to solve. The obstacle itself is not a problem since it presents a real trouble that even makes me wonder if our MC could solve it or not. But, the way he solved it are always anticlimatic, every single boss fight at later chapter always leave me saying "That's it?". For example there are 2 major bosses in 200++ ch that is killed with a lucky coincidence and a lucky instant hit kill. There's always a huge build up for each of those bosses but somehow it always ends with our MC getting a 1% instant kill chance or a lucky coincidence negating all of the ******* that the author builds up towards it. Totally unrewarding for the readers. It really boggles my mind when the author decided to kill a boss in a single chapter in a totally anti-climatic way. The boss has been build up as a stalking predator that could assassinate the MC at any time. But, since our MC received a major power up the boss just got used as a punching bag. I mean c'mon you already build up the fight with this boss for 100 chapters! And he got killed in a single chapter. And also it seems like the author is in a rush to finish the story(?).There are a few major arc that just happens. Like for example the story needs our MC to do this 5 task so he just did the 5 task with no actual problem in doing it. And sometime during the fights that are sprinkled in during the quest that absolutely have no ******* at all the author suddenly said "Oh yeah he's at 1% health" to create artificial sense of urgency. Plus some of the power up during later chapter are totally undeserved. For example, there's a problem about the lack of boats. So suddenly our MC has the capability of building boats in the next chapter. And suddenly in the next chapter he's building the best legendary boat since the boatyard coincidentally has the guy that build the legendary boat during his life as a human. Yeah.... that's kinda pushing it That problem above has occurred lots of times during the story. The MC has a problem of reach when he is mounted. So the blacksmith in the next chapter has a legendary glaive that he could buy. Then MC has a problem of obtaining the blood of a lvl 999 monster. Yeah the monster is selling it in exchange for something that the MC is already producing. Wait he doesn't have enough? Worry not the monster accept loans without any interest. 2. Stability of Updates In my experience it's quite stable. 1 ch/day is enough for this kind of novel. Nothing interesting to review in this part 3. Character Design The novel has tons of unique characters that I think are very interesting to read. Each of them has an unique characteristic and design that I think other novel could take this novel as an example on how to create an interesting character. But during fights the story really struggles in making them look useful, especially the parts that includes the undead army. 4. World Background For the undead world the author did a really great job in creating a believable environment for our skeleton guy to wander around and have an adventure. But sadly some of the times in the living world some places feels like they are just plopped there since they are not that well developed except for the Wild region. ---- End of the review ---- Also the during equipment upgrade part the author really loves copy and pasting the same exact paragraph 5 times. Although it's how an equipment is presented in MMO it's still pretty strange looking at the same exact paragraph 5 times in a row. This problem still exists in the later chapter, quite weird since I think the readers would complain about it already Also the during equipment upgrade part the author really loves copy and pasting the same exact paragraph 5 times. Although it's how an equipment is presented in VRMMO it's still pretty strange looking at the same exact paragraph 5 times in a row. This problem still exists in the later chapter, quite weird since I think the readers would complain about it already Also the during equipment upgrade part the author really loves copy and pasting the same exact paragraph 5 times. Although it's how an equipment is presented in VRMMO it's still pretty strange looking at the same exact paragraph 5 times in a row. This problem still exists in the later chapter, quite weird since I think the readers would complain about it already Also the during equipment upgrade part the author really loves copy and pasting the same exact paragraph 5 times. Although it's how an equipment is presented in VRMMO it's still pretty strange looking at the same exact paragraph 5 times in a row. 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