Review Detail of Asmodai216 in The Obscene System(Dropped)

Writing Quality: Great. No problems with grammar, sentence structure is smooth. I don't even remember seeing a single typo. 5 stars. Stability of Updates: Not enough chapters to have a reliable base, and the author has previously taken a hiatus on some of his prior works. That said, I'm more lenient than most as long as a quality chapter is released every week, as opposed to daily. I'll give it 5 stars here as well. Story Development: Again, this is still too early to really tell, but I'll give my thoughts on what is available. This story is thus far, unique. The MC has achievable goals and works towards them in a reasonable manner. There's no railroading for the sake of the plot, the MC doesn't act out of character in order for something the author wants to happen. If the author wants something to happen, it happens through a believable series of events, and it is wonderful to get that in an original fic on this site. Provisionally, and only because 9 chapters is nowhere near enough to gauge to quality of a novel, 5 stars. Character Design: A bit lacking to be honest. The side characters are full of life, the mother, neighbor, maid/nurse all have clearly defined personalities. The problem is the main character. Again, it may just be because it's so early into the novel, but we know more about the side characters thoughts and feelings than that of the MC. So far, all I've gotten is that the MC was introduced to the Obscene System so early that now all he thinks about is obscene things. As fantastic as that is, it doesn't make for an engaging character. Once again, this review is as of chapter 9, I'm hoping we see more development now that he's starting Junior High. Provisionally, 4 stars. World Background: Pretty standard, it seems to take place in the modern world, but there could be more to it. The important aspect of this category has been the System, and its effect on the world around it. The author has created a system, given the main character powers, and those powers have an impact beyond the immediately obvious. There was actual thought put into this, which is immensely refreshing. Provisionally, 4 stars. The system is integrated into the MC and the world smoothly and without problems, but the world itself hasn't really been touched on yet.