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2018-06-26 00:17

I have to say. while your grammar could use work, compared to other fan fics or original novels, i would yours ranks in the middle. your chapters are bit short but its within limits and your updates are consistent. i do like the way the story is flowing. I am glad that you are not using the harem tag in this novel. it just doesnt really work with this novel and while your naruto is different from the original i am glad you are sticking to the pairing of hinata. keep up the good work

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