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Sazassin
SazassinLv36yr
2018-06-18 02:36

Everything is pretty good, and stable for a new book. But try to think out of the box about the pace of the story a little and background. Check out my book End Of My Boring Life

The Torture System

ChueFeng
4.4
23 Chs

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ChueFeng
ChueFengAuthor

I'm sorry to say but your book is not that interesting.

6yr
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ChueFeng
ChueFengAuthor

I'm quite the shameless man. And so I will just you know... give myself a free 5 star. Ah god, writing 140 words is so bs. No one has time to do that.

6yr

LeafGod
LeafGodLv5

I enjoy the book. The only thing that I don't like about the book is the grammar. Dialogue grammar needs improvement. I took grammar lessons to learn how to write dialogues correctly. If you want an example on how do it correctly then read the dialogue from my book Nirvana. I use different ways of wording the dialogue and you can use it as a model to improve your book. Nice job and keep going.

6yr
lolz6262
lolz6262Lv2

I like the book a lot. There are many mistakes in your chapters, but they're not that big of an issue. Though I do hope for more bonus chapters :))

6yr
newdate
newdateLv5

How old are you and how many book have you read? If you really want to become a better writer then here my advice to you. Drop this book that you are writing And read other books that other have written until you completely forget about this book Then pick up this book again and re-read what you have written IT IS TERRIBLE!

6yr
ShamelesSinner
ShamelesSinnerLv5

The MC in this novel is matured and have an interesting system.. Also the Author is promising. Currently Im waiting for more precious update.

6yr
NotOnMyLvl
NotOnMyLvlLv2

Great book. The author has A lot of potential. I'm new to this website and currently, this is one of my favorite books. Also since it's summer now, will you increase the chapters per week?

6yr
Freedommmmm
FreedommmmmLv2

Love the book. I hope you can maybe increase the updates to 14 chaps per week now that it is summer. Also, can you increase the chapter size? I feel like the chapters are a bit short... Other than that nothing else :)

6yr
JongSaeJing
JongSaeJingLv10

This is my first review, I couldn't hold back myself after reading some chapters and seeing the ratings I had to make an objective review of this novel. It's one of the worst I ever read. Absolutely nothing is good in it. Writing is horrible. Story doesn't make ANY sense (let's not talk about the lack of originality). Character make as much sense as the story. World background is inexistent. Don't lose your time.

6yr
savagekun345
savagekun345Lv1

I love this book. I hope you upload more chapters. And i hope you also increase size of chapters. Also can u upload 14 chap per week. Have a great day.

6yr
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