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2019-12-13 03:09

Make sure you are better and don't risk your health over a few chapters and make sure to make many instead. even if we have to WAIT! Your story are progressing in a direktion that make me believe the story! I live the life of the character when I read the story!

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Reading first 20 chapters lowered my intelligence, so i wanted to see how many people sticked to the story till the latest chapter. Not many and can't say i expected anything else. At the start it was all going good, but then that little girl appeared and i kinda knew it would go downhill from now on. It seems to be theme or more like an obsession with little girls that chinese novels have. They are always there to make the plot retarded to force MC into situation he wouldn't be in. It is always goes like this: 1. MC finds a little girl by sheer coincidence and out of all the kids that are dying before him you know he will save her. Not only because in the pandemonium somehow a kid voice was able to reach the MC, but also because the kid was crying while advertising her name which just so happens to MC dead sister name. What a coincidence!! Fuck all the other kids and people now he'll do everything to save her, even though he's out of shape, crippled, below average intelleigence guy with no foresight. 2. That little girl is very special. Apparently this one was 1 of 9 in the whole world, what a coincidence!! that our MC encountered her. 3. Suddenly MC will go to any lengths for that little girl because why the fu*k not, he has already died for her why not 100 times again and she's a kid who he fell in love for after 2-3 dialogues, can't abandon her now. Now this unhealthy nonsensical obsession will drive the future plot. 4. That little girl then will become the weak link/target of people who wants her 1 in a billion physique, or maybe when he's facing a god or some other sh*t, and her power will help him. Thank god he found her by coincidence in the start. 5. Apparently by another innocent coincidence he encountered a zombie way over the starter difficulty and got mortally wounded and infected while protecting the little girl and survived by just a sec again by sheer coincidence of girl having some sort of power and double personality which she conveniently wasn't able to use before, but did so now. All these coincidences in just a few chapters. Now as a seasoned chinese novel reader you already know that MC will spend his time protecting that little girl, wasting resources on her, and maybe eventually getting in relationship with her. What? You though little girls in chinese novels were for some Innocent reason? 9/10 expect it to happen. In the last scenario she was killed. MC is a retard as well. He apparently thought it was enough to prepare for doomsday with just stocking guns and food. Even an idiot would've noticed that they need more than that to survive, especially as a cripple. Was he thinking of just camping in car with limited resources that will eventually run out? Base of operation? Future food procurement? training? A google seach on how to survive apocalypse? Taking measure of system capabilities? A common guy would have searched the whole system store in his free time just out of sheer curiosity, but MC didn't. He only knew enough for plot's sake that he could buy space rings but didn't knew that he could buy skill cards and being a retard that he is, brought a car without ever thinking his retarded ass can't drive cars or even use guns to save his life. All these coincidences, and mc being a retard are just signs of bad writing by author's who can't think of better plot progession devices so they just use what everyone else is using. How is this story better than others infinite stories where Mc is in apocalypse with a little girl and a system? This one has apparently has a perverted system of some sorts for lulz i guess. Totally won't get old in 10 chapters. Good luck with your future works author.

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