Now I actually enjoy this story and I believe the idea is great but the execution not so much.Problem number 2 you havent updated in 3 weeks.Problem number 3 we know nothing about the world hes in like litterally nothing.Problem 4 the changing of point of veiws is way to confusing you should just stick to one point of view.
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