Review Detail of AzureWolf in True King of the Pirates
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Ok I have read enough to Understand what kind of MC the author is trying to make from this line in Chap 23 "I'm no hero but as long as I see something I don't agree with, I won't hesitate to do what's required of me!". The author is trying to make his MC a saint. but all i seen so far as soon as he arrived at the town is to attempt to kill a couple of marines doing their job so they can feed them selves or family. Their job was to capture fugitives which by standard are extremely dangerous to the public. he helped the other 3 girls escape and saved the one that was captured. he then says hes not a hero and will kill people he don't agree with. Author from what i understand you are trying to make a MC that is purely evil in nature but only show his good guy act to close ones or to the ones he wants to use (white haired girl). If by chance he makes his way to that toy island. by your standard he will kill everyone that is living there. When you first showed the marines you portrayed them as rapists licking their lips and making them say they'll have fun with them...uhh? what... please don't stick chinese tropes into a novel like this. Yes in the anime they were subtle, hardly noticeable and far in between. I will still continue to read this. The MC is just very poorly one sided still. Author stop trying to make your MC the good guy here you are clearly making him to be a cold blooded killer but shadowing it by friendship and happiness when he sees his friends. Also justifying his killing is also dumb so don't try that. there are more perspectives then just the MC try to think what others would think. that's what makes a novel more interesting and complex. Example would be the marine that he killed could have a family and is just trying to feed them by doing his job, However, your MC killed him for no reason other then to say I'm stronger so killing is justified. Knocking the marine out would be the best approach in this situation. You are clearly trying to make the MC infamous early for killing people when this is a very stupid move to make if you have a brain.
True King of the Pirates
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Dropped as of Ch 32. There were just too many scenarios that could have been avoided and is just bothersome at this point. I understand that your trying to improve your writing and or english. I just don't understand the direction your taking in this story. from ch 1 to 32 the story seems to do nothing but walk up a hill and jump off. all these reviews praise your story like the second coming. I for one don't. All these positive reviews is reflecting on your story. there are just so much wrong with the personality of the MC and how much power creep he has. Vergo is strong but was killed by the MC at 8 or so years old. You may as well make the MC strong enough to kill the 4 in around 100 chapters or less Which he most probably be 18 yrs old at that point and people on his ship saying hes a monster over and over every chapter of the way.
TheOneWithBooks:It's a unique story, which has its own charm, some things in the comment are valid, but I don't agree with some
I dropped at first chapter, The reason why he got such an impossible reward is basically because he was a very good guy almost saint like, Then next paragraph, he chose to become a Demon cultivator HUUWHATTTTTT?? WT*! i dont understand! you even made him something like destinyless so he can do whaTever he wants. This doesnt even fit his core character from what you describe of him from the very first sentence.
Backstory to transmigration/reincarnation is irrelevant as ever in this type of fiction. Despite that I thought it was pretty good up to chap 100, then it turned into a trash xianxia. Courting death, entering the scene while laughing, arrogance and stupidity of characters, random mobs trash talking and reaching retarded conclusions behind characters backs, there is even a merchanct guild straight out of xianxa with a cliche auction.
Jojo775:Backstory to transmigration/reincarnation is irrelevant as ever in this type of fiction. Despite that I thought it was pretty good up to chap 100, then it turned into a trash xianxia. Courting death, entering the scene while laughing, arrogance and stupidity of characters, random mobs trash talking and reaching retarded conclusions behind characters backs, there is even a merchanct guild straight out of xianxa with a cliche auction.
I tried it, don't remember much but it was also trash, MC was way too OP and that memory thing was BS. Nothing here is good, I had hopes for the True King, that's gone even if it comes back from hiatus, Narutoverse Cultivation Style is okay, and Skyrim Dragonborn Within is readable.
Redzz:Try "reincarnation in one piece world" so far it was good
Jojo775:I tried it, don't remember much but it was also trash, MC was way too OP and that memory thing was BS. Nothing here is good, I had hopes for the True King, that's gone even if it comes back from hiatus, Narutoverse Cultivation Style is okay, and Skyrim Dragonborn Within is readable.
Not really sure about why you are so triggered because honestly it's rare to find a fanfic with so much effort put into the world building and plot, character development. I made it a little farther than you but am gonna stop there for now because it's a bit too stiff and that's not what i'm looking for atm.
IamYourFather:I dropped at first chapter, The reason why he got such an impossible reward is basically because he was a very good guy almost saint like, Then next paragraph, he chose to become a Demon cultivator HUUWHATTTTTT?? WT*! i dont understand! you even made him something like destinyless so he can do whaTever he wants. This doesnt even fit his core character from what you describe of him from the very first sentence.