Review Detail of _Mort_ in The Automotive System

I chose to leave this on-hold until you got enough chapters done, like 20 or so, but since that does not seem to be happening anytime soon, I'll have to do with 4 chapters. Writing Quality - 3 Sub-par, there is an excessive amount of speech and little to no descriptions. You can think of it as a bunch of dolls with names stuck on, lying in a white room just speaking nonstop. There are lines and more lines of uninterrupted speech. Meanwhile, I still don't know what the main character looks like. Stability of Updates - 2 Really bad, you lack the necessary commitment for writing web fiction. I would advise you to reserve some time for writing everyday, at least 1 hour and always on the same period of the day, like 8pm to 9pm. Story Development - 4 Average, because there is not enough content for it to be relevant. There is a lack of something very important on your story: Purpose. What is the premise your going for? What's the spice of your story? Where will you be 50 chapters in? What makes the plot move and what makes the story unfold? Character Design - 4 Average, because there is not enough content for it to be relevant. Improve descriptions and try to write a sheet for every character, describe his personality and unique traits so you can be consistent. World Background - 4 Average, because there is not enough content for it to be relevant. The system thing is a convenient way to waste the reader's time, although it can be good when used as a complement to the story, it should never be its focus, else you'll just turn it into a numbers game. At the present moment you have an entire chapter, out of 4 total, dedicated to describing a random system which came out of nowhere. And that is bad. Alright, this is the roast you requested a few days ago. I'll update it in the future, if you get to 20 chapters. Also, take note that the author name in the cover is different from your username, which is also bad.