Story is interesting but overall it's quality isn't good. Word arrangement is not good. It feels like written by fifth grade student who's English is not good. Lines are broken. There's no rhythm in story lines.
Shigun
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LIKELet me tell you something more which is that in Japanese and Chinese( I don't know about other national languages) there aren't specific words which distinguish past,present, and future conditions. But in English every condition according with or without the time relation has it's own style to be described.
Nawaabzadah:Word grammar is not good at all. You can't differentiate between past present and future. Where you should apply the word "could" you apply "can" You can't even differentiate between ****** problems, How can you translate/write a good story?