Review Detail of yuhyeenie in The Last Human Reincarnates
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Hi there! I will give you an honest review. I find this book really interesting, you as a writer, can improve a lot in the future. Though, your saying that your writing is in low quality... I suggest you shouldn't undermine yourself. There is still lots of rooms to improve. So... moving on, I want to give my honest review about this book. I placed three stars in your writing quality, it is because you didn't really mind some of the basics. And i'm quite meticulous about it. For example in your novel: 'an tiny-' Please remember that 'AN' is an article that is used before a vowel letter. When you are using a consonant letter, use the article 'A'. The correct way is 'a tiny-' not 'an tiny-' The line: (This tale begins in an insignificant galaxy with a common stellar system, in an tiny little blue Planet that, by luck, can be find in the inhabitable zone.) found in your first chapter. = Please be reminded, first chapters and first sentence introduction always gives the first impression, without a hooking introduction people wouldn't continue reading it. The first sentence or line didn't give much impact to me as a reader. I'm really sorry :(... Another thing is, what do you mean 'by luck' ? I don't really get this first part. Finding that blue planet isn't called lucky because the area is inhabitable. Find a word that could complement the whole sentence itself. Also, the dependent clause or fragment, 'can be find in the inhabitable zone', you didn't mind the past and present tense. Usually when narrating, authors uses past tense so I suggest changing it to: 'it can be found as an inhabitable zone' because your talking about the blue planet, its not the blue planet is found in an inhabitable zone, it is the blue planet that is not habitable. I'm sorry for the long review :) though it is lacking, I am just serving this as a mini guide when writing.... I hope you aren't offended
The Last Human Reincarnates
TReis
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Thank you for not getting angry TvT Im always worried that if I criticize people gets angry and the likes... Im actually interested in your novel, just continue writing and improving, I could help you from time-to-time :) Just tell me
TReis:Thanks for the review, I will update the chapters with your feedback. I don't be mad with you point my errors because I'm writing in English with this very objective. I thank you for your review. If you got interested, or have spare time, keep reading :D
Don't bother with people who get angry for your constructive criticism. I do the same but I focus more on the logic part instead of the grammar since I don't mind reading sloppy writings as much as sloppy logic. Like a novel I read. They trained their son and in less than 7 years of training he was equal as his parents with decades of efforts....wtf
yuhyeenie:Thank you for not getting angry TvT Im always worried that if I criticize people gets angry and the likes... Im actually interested in your novel, just continue writing and improving, I could help you from time-to-time :) Just tell me
Thanks :D... about the novel you read, if you base it on logic, it's naturally impossible since people needs a strong foundation. If you only learned martial arts after a few years of training, you will naturally lose due to weak foundation and lack of experience. Without enough experience and training, you cannot defeat someone who trained for decades.
KoFu_:Don't bother with people who get angry for your constructive criticism. I do the same but I focus more on the logic part instead of the grammar since I don't mind reading sloppy writings as much as sloppy logic. Like a novel I read. They trained their son and in less than 7 years of training he was equal as his parents with decades of efforts....wtf