Review Detail of EveningSong in System of gods and devils

Tl:DR C+, Has potential, take a binge when it hits 75 chapters or so to see how it develops. The Good: the same old good rpg system in a cultivation world concept with a solid twist. The basic premise of this novel is well thought out and the author has spent some time to flush it out in the chapters. The Meh: like many others in its category the novel needs an editor. In its current form the novel reads like it was written by a high school freshman. I understand that the author is not a native English speaker, so kudos to you friend for putting the effort into this work, but you have lots of room to improve. Look at Once a Human, Now a Paracite as proof that improvement is possible. God speed. The Bad: the adage of "show, don't tell" went out the window. The pacing of the naritive needs improvement and the ******* and release cycle might as well not exist. In its current form reading this novel is interesting but unsatisfying.