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Review Detail of VivTheMage in Once Human, Now a Parasite

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VivTheMage
VivTheMageLv135yrVivTheMage

I originally was really hoping to like this story but unfortunately character development, editing, story development, and world building are completely lacking. The character goes from very ruthless (understandable thanks to his background story), and then instantly when he meets this woman who has a similar story he falls in love and his personality changes (and hers for that matter). I don't mind romance at all but this author made it forced and quite unbelievable. Even giving excuses saying "Just because they professed their love doesn't mean they're a couple" but then immediately in the next chapter they're calling each other lovers. That flirty behavior and constant groping and kissing and moaning is just completely irrelevant from the story it seemed the author was trying to write in the beginning but then it turned into a bad romance novel I'd find in my grannies book shelf. Work harder on editing as inconsistencies can pull people out of the story. Such as: This amulet curses people to lose 5% of their power, but then a couple paragraphs later its now 50%. I really really really wanted to like this but I just couldn't continue. My advice stick to the kind of story you want to write and don't make excuses or try to pander to all the fans on this website. Be honest with what kind of story this is, (which at this point I'd call a romance fantasy slice of life with an OP MC) you'll get the type of readers that love that kind of story and get less bad reviews and angry comments.

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Once Human, Now a Parasite

TheCrow

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TheCrow
TheCrowAuthorTheCrow

Sure, thanks for the review.

Billybob100
Billybob100Lv1Billybob100

yeah, i honestly wanted to read it for it being a rare kind of novel about a parasite mc sounded interesting but after all of the problems stated above and it turning into slice of life i dropped it

VivTheMage
VivTheMageLv13VivTheMage

It’s unfortunate but it may just be it’s not the type of novel I thought it was. I’m personally more interested in novels with just martial arts with little romance unless it obvious from the start romance is a factor. It wasn’t obvious from the start so it put me off. I’m sure for some it’s their cup of tea