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DtsnapLv46yr
2018-06-13 01:23

Quick Pros and Cons PROS: Cute story idea. Nice start to a romance. CONS: Poorly developed MC. World building needs development. Story and character needs work. ex. The MC reactions to a different world are unrealistic. Accepts situations too easily and author never explains why. CONCLUSION: Good romantic story idea, execution needs a lot of work! Reads like a first draft.

Macha's Journey

BabyTanuki
4.6
236 Chs

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BabyTanuki
BabyTanukiAuthor

Thanks for the input. I prefer to keep the MC's reactions how they are, but am interested in what sorts of world building you would like to see. I try to add one thing every chapter. Do you want a more detailed description of the scenery or more magical items? I will try to go back and edit in explanations for her easy acceptance. I am always up to suggestions. Thanks!

6yr
Ahyui
AhyuiLv5

Yes pleace 😊

BabyTanuki:Thanks for the input. I prefer to keep the MC's reactions how they are, but am interested in what sorts of world building you would like to see. I try to add one thing every chapter. Do you want a more detailed description of the scenery or more magical items? I will try to go back and edit in explanations for her easy acceptance. I am always up to suggestions. Thanks!
6yr
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BabyTanuki
BabyTanukiAuthor

Author here: This is my first time writing a novel and I hope you like it. Although it is a romance, I will also have action scenes. I will be checking the comments from the day before so feel free to share your thoughts. Thanks! Also, please like the comment to make sure it stays at the top.

6yr

Saywhat
SaywhatLv11

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Stir_fries
Stir_friesLv11

This is the type of book where it has the right amount of suprises. Not to little and not too much so it won't feel like you on your seat constantly or making you feel bored, it's just right type of story progression. The female lead is very easy going, intelligent, and a fast learner. A character build-up where she doesn't know how to fight but get better, not only in fighting but also in romantic relationship ( tyr♡macha) And it also has different view points of others which males it interesting. SO READ THE BOOK IT'S GOOD!😍😻

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lady_shierra01
lady_shierra01Lv11

I like the story and how it goes, hoping for king fryer to have a place in macha’s heart..but i also like tyr’s character...,job well done author hope for more updates....goodluck!!!

6yr
Bleachfan
BleachfanLv6

This is a fantasy, romance, and action rolled into one novel. Pretty interesting. I love the mythical creatures. However, if you have a faint heart, this story is not for you.

6yr
genelyn18
genelyn18Lv2

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lynerparel
lynerparelLv14

OK so I know I just read up to chapter 27, and what can I say but this novel is nice. Unlike most of the originals here including mine, the writing quality is impeccable. The stability of the updates is good, as evidence by how many chapters this novel has. The story development is in a pace that's good, just not my kinda pace. I like very fast pace works, but because if one writer does that he couldn't write good developments, that's why this pacing is the best kind, but not really my ideal. The character design is good, I can actually imagine and feel what the characters look like, as if I was there myself. The world background at the point I'm reading is not really there yet, but I'm sure that reading on, the world would open up and bring me into a world of wonder and fantasy. Overall this book shouldn't be stuck in it's current rank it's a book worthy of being the top 30 or dare I say in the top 15 way higher than my work. :)

6yr
LadyRedHood
LadyRedHoodLv12

'Macha's Journey' is an amazing and wonderful read that will have you anticipating every update. A change from Transmigration tales, Macha is sent to another world, body and soul, where she meets Tyr, the leader of a mercenary guild and cousin to the king. In this world where the people have pointed ears are tall and slender and live for hundred of years, Macha stands out with her short stature and round eyes. Though she very quickly gets her pointed ears and even more quickly learns the language of her new land. The story is well woven, with naturally flowing time skips and a very colorful world and memorable character's. A story of love and the many forms it comes in, this is a must read for those looking for a change of pace.

6yr
KiaSoul
KiaSoulLv4

Good Novel, the grammar is beyond anything I could write just wish there was more *** scenes! Sex pls also give Macha a harem More more more More more more More more more More more more More more more More more more More more more More more more

6yr
Kegil
KegilLv4

READ IT! Daily updates, interesting side characters, and the MC gets stronger. Its a mix of fantasy & romance. Pretty sure the author isn't lying when they said its going to be a long story. Chapter 100 & still on the first guy. Its good & you see the romance develop.

6yr
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