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RandomMobA
RandomMobALv46yr
2018-07-09 23:29

TBh, i came to this Novel cause of the elegant cover art and was expecting something refined and gallant read. Considering how this was supposed to be a novel about the other world's entertainment industry. However i was proven wrong. Just the first chapter alone immediately obliterated that impression. Instead of a calm protagonist or a badass protagonist. We get a 2nd generation form xianxia world type of protagonist. But instead of acting that role for disguise sake like those guys from (TTNH, OEM) He was simply showing his true nature. I don't see any redeeming factor in our mc. Honestly if he wasn't the novel protag. The mc would have already ended destroyed and humiliated by a true mc type. I feel like the mc was supposed to be reincarnated to a cultivation world but samsara made a mistake and send him to this world Instead. I hate how he instantly got cocky just right after knowing that he hold the entertainment knowledge superiority. He was that kind of mc who wouldn't develop as a character for a 1000 chapter but instead he was the type who will face mack all the way till he die which just not my cup of tea. He was incredibly childish and the so-called past experiences of his was clearly that of the lower society. I don't see him surviving the upper rung with his attitude and past experiences. I only see him suppressing the upper rung with his knowledge making them forcefully comply not by his ability but only with his knowledge. Meaning he doesnt have his own ability. He can only use things that weren't his in the first place. And be shamelessly proud it. Major turn off Anways Plot and novel writing style is good and almost comparable to a pro translator quality. But still i simply dislike the mc. Seeing how he was. I dont see myself reading this in a long run. Plus the way how things are. you plagiarising real world works will put this novel the same fate as the novel i'm really a superstar not only will you gave us face smacking you will also face copyrights issues in the near future. TlDR EVERYTHING IS NICE EXCEPT FOR THE MC. CHANGE THE MC AND THIS NOVE WILL BE PERFECT

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David_Tieku
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As the author I'm naturally biased by nature, but only thing I would say to you is to read on..... hahaha yep that was a pretty shameless thing to ask for. But in all seriousness I would urge you to read on from chapter 12 (that's what Webnovel said you read up to). Later on the story does develop into a 'scheming battle' though its not something ridiculously intricate it's effective. As for the copyright don't worry after seeing what happened to IRAS. I have made a clear line between us and copyright strikes even going as far as to write the songs used later on myself. P.s the face smacking is turned off later on in the story, people didn't seem to appreciate it as much as I thought they would, as seen from earlier comments so i have stopped. If you still don't enjoy the story after reading on then fair enough.

RandomMobA
RandomMobALv4

Well... Haha Alright, i don't really have problem about you as an author. Its just i find the mc really cringy. I mean dude, 12 chapters was 2 days in his world. and in those 2 days. I don't really know how he gain the guts to play a millionaire kid and spend his 6 million Without fear. I mean as an ***** and a washed up actor in his previous life. He should atleast know how brutal the society is specially in the higher rung. Can having a entertainment knowledge superiority could really gave you such guts that you intantly forget that the opponent is still a millionaire and capable of hurting you or your parent. making your life miserable and kidnapping you and throw your beat up body in a river or something.. Man, i just find his guts illogical. Even zhang Ye in his early days wasn't that gutsy

RandomMobA
RandomMobALv4

Also EDITS: currently reading your work and cans say that. Bro.. You really need some works in your word composing. Ex. Devil's treaty could be Devil's contract Musical Wizard into a Music prodigy Also, you use quite a lot of awkward sounding phrases/sentences and also you keep praising the mc verbally which in a sense could be more better if it was the 2nd person's monologue as if they are secretly admiring the mc Ex. Awkward sounding : "When did you write these, Xiaohua? I remember you didn't learn any musical knowledge?" from ch.20 Improvised version from me : "Hey bro, did you wrote this. Your amazing. I never knew you had a such profound musical talent" Verbal praising : "You truly are a genius, boss. Only you could create six songs in a row... and such godly songs at that. This efficiency is unprecedented. Working under this great boss, will truly help us conquer the music world." ch.20 Inner monologue improvised version : Boss is truly such a genius. To be able to create six amazing music in a span of one night.. Working under such person. Maybe the dream of reaching the peak of the entertainment world were no longer be a dream. TBH, reading your works feels like reading a awkward non-standard chinese writing style. You praise your character verbally too much. When you can do it better on monologue also slef praising verbally like how he said to his maid that he was a mature and sensible now, feels incredibly awkward. You should have written it in a way that mc didnt have to express or tell his maturity but instead secretly noticed by people around them and secretly appreciated by them inside their heads (no verball communication needed) that could have beem more smoother and way cooler than him saying "i'm mature now"

ZmTing
ZmTingLv5

But I liked author's version more thought.... I never find such problem...

RandomMobA:Also EDITS: currently reading your work and cans say that. Bro.. You really need some works in your word composing. Ex. Devil's treaty could be Devil's contract Musical Wizard into a Music prodigy Also, you use quite a lot of awkward sounding phrases/sentences and also you keep praising the mc verbally which in a sense could be more better if it was the 2nd person's monologue as if they are secretly admiring the mc Ex. Awkward sounding : "When did you write these, Xiaohua? I remember you didn't learn any musical knowledge?" from ch.20 Improvised version from me : "Hey bro, did you wrote this. Your amazing. I never knew you had a such profound musical talent" Verbal praising : "You truly are a genius, boss. Only you could create six songs in a row... and such godly songs at that. This efficiency is unprecedented. Working under this great boss, will truly help us conquer the music world." ch.20 Inner monologue improvised version : Boss is truly such a genius. To be able to create six amazing music in a span of one night.. Working under such person. Maybe the dream of reaching the peak of the entertainment world were no longer be a dream. TBH, reading your works feels like reading a awkward non-standard chinese writing style. You praise your character verbally too much. When you can do it better on monologue also slef praising verbally like how he said to his maid that he was a mature and sensible now, feels incredibly awkward. You should have written it in a way that mc didnt have to express or tell his maturity but instead secretly noticed by people around them and secretly appreciated by them inside their heads (no verball communication needed) that could have beem more smoother and way cooler than him saying "i'm mature now"
ZmTing
ZmTingLv5

By the way I feel kind of cringe when I read the improved version of yours.... It's just sound way more cheesy than what the author write... it feels so.. Uhmmmm.. How can I say it.... I don't know.. Just a weird feeling

RandomMobA:Also EDITS: currently reading your work and cans say that. Bro.. You really need some works in your word composing. Ex. Devil's treaty could be Devil's contract Musical Wizard into a Music prodigy Also, you use quite a lot of awkward sounding phrases/sentences and also you keep praising the mc verbally which in a sense could be more better if it was the 2nd person's monologue as if they are secretly admiring the mc Ex. Awkward sounding : "When did you write these, Xiaohua? I remember you didn't learn any musical knowledge?" from ch.20 Improvised version from me : "Hey bro, did you wrote this. Your amazing. I never knew you had a such profound musical talent" Verbal praising : "You truly are a genius, boss. Only you could create six songs in a row... and such godly songs at that. This efficiency is unprecedented. Working under this great boss, will truly help us conquer the music world." ch.20 Inner monologue improvised version : Boss is truly such a genius. To be able to create six amazing music in a span of one night.. Working under such person. Maybe the dream of reaching the peak of the entertainment world were no longer be a dream. TBH, reading your works feels like reading a awkward non-standard chinese writing style. You praise your character verbally too much. When you can do it better on monologue also slef praising verbally like how he said to his maid that he was a mature and sensible now, feels incredibly awkward. You should have written it in a way that mc didnt have to express or tell his maturity but instead secretly noticed by people around them and secretly appreciated by them inside their heads (no verball communication needed) that could have beem more smoother and way cooler than him saying "i'm mature now"
RandomMobA
RandomMobALv4

Welp.. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ those are just some makeshift revision of mine while copying the chinese novel translator writing style. I'm not a writer and english aint even my first language so meh.. Considering author-san is copying the Xuanhuan chinese writing style. I just felt his writing a bit cringy when compared to real chinese style (chinese writing most of time used old sounding phrases to sound profound and brilliant). Also aint chinese style writing always cheesy. Specially when bootlickers are bootlicking. And when audience anre over exaggerating..

ZmTing:By the way I feel kind of cringe when I read the improved version of yours.... It's just sound way more cheesy than what the author write... it feels so.. Uhmmmm.. How can I say it.... I don't know.. Just a weird feeling
ZmTing
ZmTingLv5

Eh, really? But i don't think so....O_o You're a liar! ˋ△ˊ what girl say is always true.. = ̄ω ̄=

RandomMobA:Welp.. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ those are just some makeshift revision of mine while copying the chinese novel translator writing style. I'm not a writer and english aint even my first language so meh.. Considering author-san is copying the Xuanhuan chinese writing style. I just felt his writing a bit cringy when compared to real chinese style (chinese writing most of time used old sounding phrases to sound profound and brilliant). Also aint chinese style writing always cheesy. Specially when bootlickers are bootlicking. And when audience anre over exaggerating..
RandomMobA
RandomMobALv4

😦 *perplexed* (O_O;)

ZmTing:Eh, really? But i don't think so....O_o You're a liar! ˋ△ˊ what girl say is always true.. = ̄ω ̄=
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