Review Detail of Falling_Star in Love Sick

Author here! Hello, this is my first time writing a novel. I don't dare score my own story 5 so 4 is good enough lol. Please excuse my grammar! English actually not my first language, but I tried my best, sorry if I made lots of mistakes. I'm trying to improve here :) So if anyone spots a grammar mistake, feel free to correct me! Thanks for reading, hope you enjoy it!