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Review Detail of Qwazi in Battle of Ascension

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OK I like this book I do first the most glaring yet smallest problem :English you need to go back and edit your work you are improving clearly but the early chapters were so atrocious I almost gave up Second it's been less then a month that's not as much time as you seem to think people have to kill hundreds if monsters a day to reach that lvl you would have to spend zero time looking only one fight after the next never taking more then a minute it's so stupid and then it's repeated by many people let's be consultative and say 100 have level 20 by chapter 50 three or so weeks in 15-16000 monsters killed meanin a million or so monsters in month in an unknown environment with bodies that are contantly changing I mean if you are five times stronger you would have to learn to walk again after all its not a gradual change so martial arts would have to be relearned over and over muscle memory would be completely useless because you'd need a different amount of strength for the same result maning your muscle mom or would have to adapt with every level that would mean many hours of practice for months Third pacing 10 or so chaps of hunting rabbits then he gets dragon blood meets a weird monster and gets the love intrest I know there is a narrative reason for that but that doesn't make it an any worse a choice from a writers perspective spread those events out with the monetonous grinding chapters So chapter 55 the Mc let's himself be surrounded instead of idk moving attacking talking strip down kissing his own ass good bye literally anything.this is not the onlytime he is stupid The final problem I have with is with 55 specifically the Mc is bound by rope tied to a stone have you ever used this wepon seen it used in real life anything I thought no because if you had you would relize there is no reason for that rope to stay wrapped around his leg the most you could is a stumble before it just before it just gets pulled back it's like binding some one with an untied rope it makes no sence I liked that you are trying focus on the people a bit not a harem also a positive trying to focus on her personality your English is improving I'm not as good about saying positive stuff I wasn't trying to be vitriolic in this review an hope I wasn't to rambaley and incoherent

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