Review Detail of LALMON in Dropped:(

its a thing to give your work a five star so i hope you guys don't mind if i do the same. i had this on my draft for months now but didn't have any idea what to do for future plot but i think i have a clear goal now. I'll try to do 4 chap a week and more if possible but who knows. Anyways a first story from me and i'll welcome any constructive criticism but be sure to be gentle with the harsh reviews.