Review Detail of overlord_God_of in Alchemy Emperor from Modern World

i read a bit of the first chapter, can you write more clearly, can you you clean upp your sentences i really like your synops and i want to read it when you have made it a bit better, if you read what you have written you can see what needs to be imroved. sorry if i sound harsh. good luck with your novel i will come back and read it later when theres more chapter. :)