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Review Detail of Sagesheep in What in this world! Oh... Wait a minute. It's another world.

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Sagesheep
SagesheepLv25yrSagesheep

This novel have charm in form of a detailed character interaction yet the weakness also laid there. At times it felt like reading through a script where person A speak his part and then person B speak his part. Yet I can feel that the world building is well formed and each of the important character is assigned a certain personality. to makes this criticism easier to read i'll make it into bullet point Pro. 1. world building is there 2. lore/system of the world exist 3. character interaction 4. character personalisation Weak. 1. script like text 2. character are introduced at bullet pace which sometimes force me to read over and over again 3. There is a distinct lack of background establishment (eg. The hall was wide and tall with windows on each side pouring sunlight to it. Filled with laughter and conversation. Maid are carrying drinks to nobles while dancing around the floor..etc etc)

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What in this world! Oh... Wait a minute. It's another world.

DeJeL

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DeJeL
DeJeLAuthorDeJeL

Thanks for that review... I will reply to the arias you said were weak: 1. After chapter 4 I decided to follow the Japanese LN feel, but outside of that, if there is anything else that seems that way, please show me, so I know what you mean.;,;. 2. Yes, that is what this 'book' of my novel is all about, I'm sorry that it's hard to read though, if you can give me any good ways of improvement, then please do.;,;. 3. I agree, but this is a real struggle for me... I need an editor I can talk to IRL.;,;. Again, thanks for the honest review.;,;.