Review Detail of SnoozySloth in What in this world! Oh... Wait a minute. It's another world.

Writing quality: 3/5, The first 3 chapters are rough. Real rough. They're written entirely in 1st person and read similar to stream of consciousness writing. In a way, that is impressive. However, it's hard to read and appears clumsy to those of us without appreciation for high-level literature. It improves in chapter 4 and by chapter 5 the writing is mostly normal. Otherwise I'd give a lower score here. Improve the first 3 chapters and I'd increase this score to a 4.5/5. Updates: Don't know. New reader. Story Development: 5/5 Story is interesting and progressing nicely. Especially once you get to ch5. Character design 3.5/5: I didn't read very far yet, so hard to judge for sure. Descriptions of characters were a bit lacking. Even the character details page fails to tell me anything beyond age and sometimes height. This is an easy fix by adding some minor descriptions as you introduce characters. Hair color, eye color, clothing style, etc. World Background 5/5 Everything is explained very well as the world opens up. Advice to author: Rewrite chapters 1 through 3 and maybe some of 4. Those beginning chapters will cause 95% or more of readers to turn away. Make those chapters similar to chapter 5's writing style. You may also want to describe your characters looks more during their 1st introductions. It's true readers like to place themselves as the MC in their head, but we still need to know what they look like.