Review Detail of Neverender in What in this world! Oh... Wait a minute. It's another world.

At first glance, I wouldn't say this novel is good. In fact, it's even a little bad. However, reading on, I could tell that there's a good amount of passion poured into the story, even though the execution can be somewhat clumsy. In this novel, the flaws are many. For starters, the dialogue are all cluttered into the same paragraph, making it difficult to tell who's talking during any given scene. Thankfully that is fixed in later chapters but it really made it difficult for me to get into the story at the beginning. Next is the story. Early on, the flow of the story is quite a bit of a mess, with far too many things going on to follow. It feels like the author is a little too impatient when writing, cramming way too much story elements and exposition with hardly any space for me to breathe when reading them. It was as if I've been put onto a roller-coaster ride that runs at full speed from the beginning and then just kept getting faster and faster. Thankfully, up to the point I have read, there are signs of things slowing down and the story having a better pacing. All in all, this story have some interesting ideas that are unfortunately not executed all that well in the beginning. But, as I read on, I can certainly see improvements happening steadily. Hopefully, in future chapters, the author learns to be a little more patient and slow down a little. If that is done, I think there'll be a lot more space to flesh out the ideas being presented and making them even more enjoyable to read.