Review Detail of Ruen in What in this world! Oh... Wait a minute. It's another world.
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-I think you are very new to writing so try to create very Sim*le dialogue. -The story wasn't engaging at all I had a hard time finish the chapters. -Too much lazy and unnecessary explanation and why put the age in a bracket. Somehow incorporate this information within the dialogue without info dumping. -Don't tell us what a character personality is before they even start talking. -Try to use 3rd person point of view. -Keep trying and plan things out.
What in this world! Oh... Wait a minute. It's another world.
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I will respond in kind -Yes, I am, but could you please elaborate on what you mean? Simple dialogue? -Could you please explain as to what I should do to make it more engaging? -(first 6 words)Please elaborate, (The rest) I will attempt this sometime in the near future (it would happen quicker if you just directly suggest how you'd do it via https://tiny.cc/WOI-Ch1). -Where do I do this? Please elaborate. -I want this to be an autobiography, the other points of view are things he learned from others at a later time... such will be explained later in the story. -I will keep trying, but the fun of writing this story is that other than the arks, I don't plan at all, I just write what comes to me.;,;.