Review Detail of TriggeredTurtle in What in this world! Oh... Wait a minute. It's another world.

I am not a fan of reading the 1st person perspective story so this review is entirely done on Cha 1. 1. mix of tenses (would prefer to read the story on past tense) 2. overused words (then, just, have) 3. Should rewrite a few sentences such as "I go to the girls' room, knock on the closed door, no answer." 4. Need writing style improvement like me T.T but if the author continues with his/her work, would eventually learn it. So, please keep working hard. :P As for the story, character, world development, there isn't much to say on the cha 1 since it only the begin. A bit information on the MC before he transmigrates to another world along with his sweetheart. However, the story seems readable and should check it out if you like the 1st person narrative story with transmigration plot.