Review Detail of MTLStory in What in this world! Oh... Wait a minute. It's another world.

Hey DeJel! Firstly, I'd like to say a big thank you on behalf of all of the people who you've promised to read their novels for! Keep up the great work! Secondly, I'd like to apologize that I won't be continuing to read your novel after Chapter 1. Though your novel has set itself up for a huge isekai adventure, one that would no doubt see itself being loved by certain groups of readers, I can't help but feel as though my brain cells are frying themselves. Now, please don't take this as me being arrogant, or being mean to you. I'm simply saying how I feel. Your writing quality, though understandable and without spelling mistakes, has much to desire. You've established your characters well, and that drives the story to a higher level of quality, but all of that is dragged into the pits when it's written poorly. I've given your story development and character design a solid Five Stars, because I do believe that you've done amazingly in those respects. Though I've only read the first chapter, because that's all I could really take, I wish you the best in working on those two features of your novel! Perhaps a little editing, and fine tuning of things here and there, would up your writing quality to a standard where people would have nothing but kind words to say about it. Good luck in the future, and thank you for being kind enough to read everyone's novels!